Talk:HMS Llewellyn (1913)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:47, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

I will review, comments to follow in next few days. Zawed (talk) 08:47, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox
 * In the builder field, should recite the name in full. The way it is presented at the moment, it looks like it is part of a location.
 * Done.

Design
 * 105 long tons... starting a sentence with a number should be avoided. Zawed (talk) 10:57, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done.
 * 24 hours during testing.?
 * Done.
 * Why is quote marks used around pom pom in the infobox but not in the text?
 * Different sources have both, but I have changed the text for consistency.

Construction
 * ...the 1912–1913 Programme...: probably need more context for the Programme
 * Done.
 * River Clyde mentioned here, but Clydebank in the infobox.
 * Reference to Clydebank removed as unnecessary.
 * Originally laid down as Picton, Llewellyn was renamed... since you have already established the original in the previous sentence, perhaps reword. May be: "The ship was renamed Llewellyn by Admiralty order on 30 September 1913,..."
 * Done
 * ...the first alphabetical class of the Navy... perhaps a bit more context here? I've read a few RN ship articles but this is the first I've heard of the alphabetical class.
 * Clarified and expanded.
 * On the The following day...
 * Done.
 * After returning to service,.... This implies she may have been damaged or refitted?
 * Clarified.
 * escort ing ed troop convoys to France
 * Done.
 * one of which struck the destroyer. need to mention that the bow was damaged as mentioned in the lead.
 * Done
 * without additional casualties. this would imply some casualties due to the torpedo strike?
 * Clarified.

Bibliography
 * Monograph No. 35 listed but not cited?
 * Removed.
 * Wrong dash style for the pg range in Newbolt.
 * Fixed.

Other stuff
 * No dupe links
 * Image tags check out OK.

That's my initial pass done. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:57, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. Please check through my changes and tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 14:44, 21 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good, I made one small edit. Passing as GA as I consider that this meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:22, 23 April 2021 (UTC)