Talk:HMS Pylades (1854)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 10:21, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 10:21, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

 * British Empire, beam, and Kilowatt are duplicated links
 * Removed
 * Article is stable
 * Image correctly licensed
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * "First-class" doesn't need a capital
 * Removed.
 * Ibid "Admirals"
 * Removed.
 * You're linking the wrong Michael de Courcy; this one died thirty years before Pylades was launched
 * Well noted. This one also seems not have achieved the rank of Admiral so I have amended the text.
 * "led to the"
 * Added.
 * Flag in class operators section is unnecessary
 * Removed.
 * "1267" needs a comma
 * Added. And to other instances of similar numbers.
 * Length between perpendiculars differs between main text and infobox
 * Corrected.

Design and development

 * Link Royal Navy at first mention of "navy"
 * Added.
 * "Pylades-class" no need for hyphen
 * Removed.
 * bm needs linking
 * Added.
 * You repeat "The engines", but there's only one?
 * Corrected and reworded to avoid the repeat.
 * Link broadside
 * Added.
 * Be consistent with numbers - you use "Ten" but "20"
 * Corrected per MOS:NUMERAL.

Construction and career

 * at Sheerness Dockyard
 * Changed.
 * for machinery
 * Changed.
 * "after disappearing 18 days beforehand" this sounds interesting, do we have any more context?
 * Unfortunately the report has limited detail.
 * "was the last Royal Navy to be deployed" missing word
 * Added.
 * Pylades serving on three distinct stations in an eight month period is a little strange. Do we know what she was doing/why she was moving?
 * The sources do not seem to say. Reading between the lines it seems that the vessel required repair more frequently.
 * "with much the copper" missing word
 * Added.
 * "on 13 January" missing year
 * Added.
 * "the vessel paid" sp
 * Corrected.
 * I know nothing about the Chesapeake affair, but considering you describe Pylades as having a "critical role" in stopping "the altercation"(?) and as such preventing the UK from joining the ACW, I think more than two sentences could be devoted to expanding on this
 * The source does not go into a lot of detail but I have added some context that I hope helps the reader. The sentence is linked to the wikipedia article that does give more information on the affair (although it does not currently mention the corvette's role) so I hope that suffices.
 * "Buckey Point" sp
 * Amended.