Talk:HMS Stronghold/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:38, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "The ship is significant as one " -> "The ship was one "
 * Fixed.


 * "RAE 1921 Target" no article??
 * Not yet. I have added a redlink.


 * "over twenty" more than twenty
 * Fixed.


 * "in 1941 and, in 1942" perhaps "and the following year"
 * Good idea.


 * "the Australian vessel's" Royal Australian Navy vessel (and link)
 * Done.


 * could link reconnaissance, and also seaplane.
 * Done.


 * "300 tons of oil " avoid starting sentences with numerals, and convert, what kind of tons?
 * Reworded, converted and linked.


 * "single 40-millimetre (1.6 in) 2-pounder pom-pom" was it really measured in millimetres when the mass was in pounds?
 * Yes. The 40-mm was called a 2-pounder.


 * "Fire control" link?
 * Done.


 * "the RAE 1921 Target" unmanned vehicle.
 * Done


 * "thirty-eight mines" 38?
 * I think it reads better in words.


 * "The Second World War" heading, no need for The.
 * Removed.


 * "the capital ship" what's one of those.
 * In this case, a battlecruiser. Linked.


 * "15 and 22 kn (28 and 41 km/h; 17 and 25 mph)." no ref.
 * Fixed.


 * "seaplane 300 mi (480 km) south of Bali.[23] The seaplane reported the position of the British vessel to the Japanese fleet." merge this, e.g. "seaplane 300 mi (480 km) south of Bali,[23] which reported its position to the Japanese fleet...."
 * Done.


 * Evans, year range needs en-dash.
 * Fixed.


 * Sturtivant and Womack likewise.
 * Fixed.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 21:48, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review. I have made the changes. simongraham (talk)