Talk:HSwMS Niord/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 12:53, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 12:53, 30 March 2024 (UTC)

Prelim

 * Long tons and nautical miles are duplicated links
 * Removed.
 * File:HMS Niord.jpg has no US PD and not currently sure about the existing Swedish rationale as no publishing date is provided for the "published anonymously before 1 January 1954" rationale.
 * Updated the source and licenses.
 * Article is stable
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * First class needs a hyphen
 * Added.
 * "However, this service did not last long." I would consider 4-5 years of service to be enough that this sentence isn't needed
 * Removed.
 * Main text could more explicitly explain the namesake (to avoid needing an infobox citation)
 * Added.
 * Should the infobox have the design speed instead of the trials speed?
 * Good point. Changed.
 * Complement differs between infobox and main text
 * Oops. Amended.

Design and development

 * Why/how was Oden successful? First sentence of the first paragraph is tipping the reader straight into the deep end!
 * Clarified.
 * A word on what makes a ship "first-class"?
 * Added.
 * "After reconstruction" give the year here
 * Added.
 * Link bow
 * Added.
 * Link nickel-steel
 * Added.
 * Suggest moving the searchlight mention to the end of the third paragraph, seems awkward coming after unrelated armour explanation
 * Moved.

Construction and career

 * Sentence beginning "On 20 February 1904..." has two "in response"s which is awkward reading
 * Reworded.
 * Day Bosanquet was a knight (1905)
 * Added.
 * Do we know where she was based during her service? Which parts of the coast, or which port?
 * Unfortunately, the sources do not give any more information than I have given.
 * "out of the front-line service"
 * Removed.
 * "and finally to be an exhibit" something missing here
 * Clarified.