Talk:Hackaball/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mokadoshi (talk · contribs) 23:58, 13 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Thank you for taking this on. I'll respond to the points below later today. Schminnte &#91;talk to me&#93; 12:57, 14 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * I think in the spirit of MOS:CONTEXTLINK the first sentence should be Hackaball is an educational toy designed to teach school children computer programming. If you disagree, let me know, but in that case at the very least ball needs to be wikilinked since it has multiple possible definitions.
 * Altered to your suggestion - S
 * Looks good, thanks. Mokadoshi (talk) 20:19, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I think you need to explain what the toy is earlier in the lead. In other words, you say that it's a ball, but only in the 4th sentence do you get around to explaining how it's used. I think you need to move the bits about the gyroscope and companion app to the second sentence of the lead. Then I think you need a paragraph break to circle back to the development and Kickstarter campaign.
 * Shifted around a bit, I haven't used a new paragraph since I feel the first paragraph would be too short, and per MOS:LEDELENGTH this should be fine as two paragraphs - S
 * Looks good, thanks. Mokadoshi (talk) 20:19, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * According to MOS:LEADCITE, any content in the lead that might be challenged should have a citation (even if the same claim later in the article is cited). The following claims I think need to have a citation to abide by this rule:
 * ...Kickstarter campaign that reached its goal of $100,000 after 23 days.
 * ...Fast Company's Innovation by Design awards.
 * ...named one of Time magazine's best inventions of 2015...
 * ...won a bronze and silver award in the 2015 Lovie Awards.
 * All cited - S
 * Looks good, and all the sources you gave appear to support the claims. Thanks. Mokadoshi (talk) 20:19, 14 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Optional: In the infobox, I think "Also known as" is not appropriate since no reliable source in the article calls it "Rule Ball" (I understand that was the original working name, but that was before the product was developed).
 * Yes, I see what you mean. Removed - S
 * Looks good, thanks. Mokadoshi (talk) 20:19, 14 March 2024 (UTC)