Talk:Half-Decent Proposal/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  R uby2010   comment!  15:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

I will review soon.  R uby2010  comment!  15:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * One dab link
 * "the tenth episode The Simpsons' thirteenth season." missing word
 * "was pitched by seres' co-creator and executive producer" typo
 * "tensions among The Simpsons' staff" apostrophe not needed
 * "some of who conidered it" typo
 * Make sure first mentions of Lenny and Springfield are wikilinked
 * "All cacti resemble Marge to Homer, and Lenny mournfully points out Mount Carlmore that he carved one blissful summer." Not sure I understand the second part of this sentence. Lenny carved Mount Carlmore?
 * "Meanwhile, Marge leaves Artie furiously, only to discover what Homer had done when she gets home and finds he is not there and that he had left a tape behind." You can probably delete the second part of this sentence (bolded). Or reword (verging on run-on sentence currently)
 * "and anti-Homer subliminal messages (though Artie seems to reveal himself soon after the messages start and wakes up Marge)." Don't quite understand this sentence either. How does Artie reveal himself?
 * Indicate Tim Long is a consulting producer
 * " This revalation garnered scrutiny" typo
 * Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with citations
 * ""Half-Decent Proposal" features the return of Artie Ziff, and the first time since the season 2 episode "The Way We Was" that the character was portrayed by American comedian Jon Lovitz." awkward phrasing
 * "On August 24, 2010, the episode was released part of The Simpsons: The Complete Thirteenth Season DVD and Blu-ray set. Al Jean, Ian Maxtone-Graham, Matt Selman, Tim Long, Dan Castellaneta, Lauren MacMullan, Matt Warburton and James Lipton participated in the audio commentary of the episode." Needs citation (just use audio commentary citations here too)
 * "manages to be worse that that dire movie [Indecent Proposal]." typo on your part, or author's? (maybe add [sic]?)
 * "calling the it "late to the party." missing word
 * "The Simpsons makes an Indecent Proposal themed episode" make sure The Simpsons and Indecent Proposal are italicized
 * Format publishers considently (use IGN for instance, not tv.ign.com)

The article is well-researched and interesting, but has a lot of grammar mistakes. They're mostly all easy fixes, so I'll place the review on hold for seven days while they are addressed. Thanks,  R uby2010   comment!  16:18, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I think I've addressed all concerns but if there's anything more, let me know. Thanks again! Queenieacoustic (talk) 17:12, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Almost forgot, but make sure to add a brief ratings summary to lead. Then it will be all set for gaining a GA ranking. Thanks,  R uby2010   comment!  17:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Done. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:07, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks great. Nice work! Pass for GA.  R uby2010   comment!  19:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)