Talk:Hallucination (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:18, 11 September 2022 (UTC)

This one shouldn't take long at all! --K. Peake 06:18, 11 September 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Keep the note in the infobox so it is know this was on the streaming version only, but add (deluxe) after the album title
 * "British band Years & Years. It was included on the" → "British band Years & Years from the"
 * "and wrote it with" → "and served as a co-writer with"
 * Imany should not be linked twice in the lead; either do it on the first occasion or the second, depending on whether the reference or her being mentioned by name is more important
 * ""Hallucination" is a 80's-inspired" → "it is a 80's-inspired"
 * Pipe four-on-the-floor to Four on the floor (music)
 * "with its lyrics" → "with the lyrics"
 * "received widespread acclaim" → "received generally positive reviews" per the body
 * "lyrics, nature as well as" → "lyrics and nature as well as Years & Years's"
 * Are you sure the link on Commonwealth of Independent States is needed?

Background and composition

 * "and wrote it with" → "and co-wrote it with"
 * Pipe four-on-the-floor to Four on the floor (music)
 * Again, should Imany be linked on the first or second instance?
 * Why have you written that it contains an interpolation when all the sources mention a sample?
 * "all of its facets." → "all of the facets."
 * [10] has no usage after the quote; shouldn't you invoke [6] instead since that mentions it like [9] does?

Reception

 * Any thematic order here for the reviews?
 * I restructured the reviews, are you fine with it? Iaof2017 (talk) 13:21, 12 September 2022 (UTC)
 * The Wyspa.fm source uses the word flawlessly, rather than unabashedly
 * "writing that "['the song'] is a perfect track" → "writing that it "is a perfect song" per the source's wording
 * Are you sure the link on Commonwealth of Independent States is needed?
 * Mention that the position in New Zealand was on the New Zealand Hot Singles Chart
 * "as well as number 28 on" → "and number 28 on"

Promotion

 * Per both being one para, couldn't you merge this with the above section and retitle to Reception and promotion?
 * "For promotion, an accompanying music video for" → "For promotion, a music video for"
 * What do you mean by overview of the latter and where is the part of the sentence after the comma sourced?
 * Removed. Iaof2017 (talk) 13:01, 12 September 2022 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure if you should use the term "observers" when only one source is invoked
 * Italicise Black Mirror
 * Italicise Squid Game
 * Przemysław Kokot's surname should only be used since you introduced him previously
 * "to an 1980s-inspired" → "to an 80s-inspired" per the source's wording

Track listing

 * Shouldn't the track listings for the original and remixes be separated?

Weekly charts

 * Are you sure Commonwealth of Independent States should be linked?
 * Remove Dance/Mix Show Airplay per WP:USCHARTS

Monthly charts

 * Good

Release history

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 07:55, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Hey thank you for picking up the review. I've responded to all of your concerns above. Cheers! Iaof2017 (talk) 13:07, 12 September 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, top job on this! --K. Peake 08:18, 13 September 2022 (UTC)