Talk:Halvdan Koht/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 21:20, 16 June 2012 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * Prose: I know you're an experienced editor, Geschichte, but your English throughout is slightly off. Alongside straightforward errors such as a minor subject until 1895,[10] The main throughout there is evidence of the writer of the article having learned English, I guess, as a second language. Examples include had the son Joachim and and his father was again mayor as well as parliamentarian. For this reason I suggest you enlist the help of the Guild (requests). This may take time, which I'm happy do do, but in the meantime I have other concerns.
 * Hm, I know. It has been copyedited before (see talk), but may need a CE again, I don't know. Geschichte (talk) 09:02, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

All for now, Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 21:20, 16 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Lead is rather long, for what is not a particularly long article. Consider consolidating it.
 * Layout generally good; one or two particularly long paragraphs that should be avoided.
 * Sourcing A major source is the Norsk biografisk leksikon which is apparently a Norwegian encyclopedia. Why is it a reliable source? Our article on the online version says that " Kunnskapsforlaget is currently searching for 1,000 experts who can make sure that the user-generated content is accurate".
 * Norsk biografisk leksikon was printed 5-10 years ago and is now published by the online encyclopedia, together with the contents of another old paper encyclopedia, Store norske leksikon. It's SNL that they're searching for editors for, the contents of NBL will remained untouched, and thus the same as when the encyclopedia was printed. Geschichte (talk) 09:02, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Would you like me to give the article another look? Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:46, 28 June 2012 (UTC)
 * I assumed you did want me to. I'm away for the next week, but in the meantime I've gone right through the article and highlighted clarifications, whos, and citations needed. Once these have been fixed, the article should be able to be passed on my return. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:27, 29 June 2012 (UTC)