Talk:Hank Aaron State Trail/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: RoySmith (talk · contribs) 02:10, 15 December 2023 (UTC)

I'm taking a look at this now. It looks like this is your first GA submission; thank you for putting in the effort to write this and submit it for review! RoySmith (talk) 02:10, 15 December 2023 (UTC)

Lead

 * The lead should not introduce any facts which aren't in the main body, i.e. "approximately 200,000 people use the trail annually".

History

 * "next to the site of what was then Milwaukee County Stadium" -> "next to Milwaukee County Stadium"
 * "Developing this Menomonee River Greenway..." this is a really complicated sentence to read and understand. I'd break it up into about 2 sentences, and simplify verbose passages like "determined to be a method by which"
 * "where it would meet a Milwaukee County-owned trail" you should give the name of that trail
 * Use convert to give metric equivalents for distances, i.e. 0.3 mi
 * "with a bridge over a rail yard" give the name and/or location of the yard
 * "By August 2006, the trail stretched from..." if that distance is known, give it.
 * "though this section was composed of compacted gravel." that implies the rest of the trail was something else, presumably paved. Tell us what.
 * Three Bridges Park redlinks might be OK, but see MOS:REDLINK and WP:REDLINK for guidance on when they should be used. Basically, is there a reasonable expectation the redlinked article will exist at some point?  Actually, what I like to do in situations like this is just go ahead and write a stub for the redlinked article and turn it blue.  If there's not enough in WP:RS to do that, then it probably shouldn't be linked.
 * "a ramp and stairway were added to the trail near 6th Street" that's awkwardly phrased. Do you mean the ramp and stairway were near 6th street, or are you talking about a trail near 6th street?  This should be rephrased.
 * "was paved with the completion of the reconstruction". Oddly phrased.  When I read "paved with..." I expect that to be followed by the material that was used to pave it, i.e. "paved with concrete", "paved with yellow bricks", etc.  I think you want something like "In 2018 when the Zoo Interchange was reconstructed, the compacted gravel section was paved..."
 * "In 2020, the trail was designated..." one-sentence paragraphs are generally discouraged. If there's nothing else that can be said here, just merge it with the previous paragraph.

Route

 * "The trail is open to walkers, joggers, bicyclists, and in-line skaters" most of those terms should be wikilinked, but find a way to word things that doesn't have a WP:SEAOFBLUE problem.
 * "Much of the trail is accessible to people with disabilities" The URL in the citation doesn't get you to a useful page. I think you want https://dnr.wisconsin.gov/topic/parks/hankaaron/recreation.  Also, the two citations on adjacent sentences can be combined into a single citation at the end of the second sentence.
 * Take a look at what I did with maplink in Bronx County Bird Club, i.e. the numbered markers. Rather than running all those coordinates in-line with the text, it'll work better to make a labeled map.  Perhaps pull the map out of the infobox and move it down to this section, so it's next to the detailed description.  I have found that the folks at WP:WikiProject Maps are usually eager to help you work through the details of how to construct these.
 * "a 2013-opened conversion of a former rail yard" -> "A former rail yard which was converted into a 24-acre green space in 2013". And, as above, convert for "24-acre".
 * The image here ("A portion of the trail in a segment bordering Canal Street") isn't a great image; I don't know what it adds to the reader's understanding of the trail.

Artwork

 * https://www.flickr.com/photos/44933821@N04/52153977866 looks like it has a licence we can use; it would be a great addition to this section if you uploaded it to commons.
 * See WP:GACR and MOS:EMBED about embedded lists. Consider reworking this entire section as prose rather than a bullet list.
 * It's worth hunting around commons and/or images.google.com to see if you can find appropriately licensed images of some of these.
 * link Minnesota State Fair
 * "refurbished at a cost of US$120,000" Leave off the "US".

Recognition

 * "Millennium Legacy Trail" I assume this is National Millennium Trails, so link there (and add it to that list).
 * The last paragraph of this section ("Considerations ...") makes no sense.