Talk:Happiness (Red Velvet song)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:06, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

It is ideal for me to review the article on this occasion, as I am the one who completed the first review, which will be relevant here. --K. Peake 07:06, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
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 * Target Euro-pop to Europop ✅
 * "as their debut single" → "as the group's debut single" with the target ✅
 * "the group's first release under the "Red" concept" → "their first release under the Red Velvet moniker" for accuracy
 * Like in the previous review, the well-known/introduction sentence is not sourced in the body
 * "A vibrant urban Euro-pop track," → "An urban Euro-pop track," because the word "vibrant" is not appropriate for the lead ✅
 * Even though you should write about what critics commented on, use summarizing instead of quotes plus add both positive and negative ✅
 * "The music video was released on August 3, 2014 but a new version of the music video" → "An accompanying music video was released on August 3, 2014, but a new version" with the wikilink ✅
 * Mention that it was due to "references to" the bombings then put "and" followed by mentioning the attacks ✅
 * "The debut stage for "Happiness" was performed in" → "Red Velvet's debut stage for the song was a performance on" ✅
 * "and further promotions was" → "and further promotion was" ✅

Background and composition
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 * The 2013 and 2014 parts are still not sourced
 * "Rumors have since sparked out" → "Rumors soon sparked out" ✅
 * Wikilink music video ✅
 * "for the "Happiness" was" → "for "Happiness" was" plus this can remain here, as it is about this being their first song when teased ✅
 * The first girl group part is still unsourced
 * Audio sample looks good! ✅
 * Again, the synth, African music beat and "Red" parts need to be sourced ✅
 * 9 offers a mention of electronic sound that you could do with writing in ✅
 * "of 121 beat-per-minute." → "of 121 beat-per-minutes." ✅
 * Wikilink Yoo Young-jin ✅

Reception
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 * "further saying that" → "further noticing how" ✅
 * The singles of the year and award should come before the commercial info, being the second para while the latter is the third ✅
 * "The song has since sold" → "The song has sold" because "since" is redundant when you have wrote "as of" ✅
 * "The song received a nomination" → "It received a nomination" ✅

Music video
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Background

 * Wikilink imagery ✅
 * Remove the official music video sentence because that is repeating the first sentence of this sub-section ✅
 * Wikilink music video on the img text and invoke [27] solely at the end of the sentence after [6] ✅

Synopsis and reception

 * "patterns and combination of live action animations." → "patterns, and combination of live action and animation." per the source ✅
 * 27 says about a split screen that you have not mentioned here ✅
 * "it shows of dynamic camera movements" → "it has dynamic camera movements" ✅
 * "from reality overcoming" → "from reality, overcoming" ✅
 * There are parts like the roller coaster from 6 that you have not mentioned even though they're notable ✅
 * "described the group's" → "noted Red Velvet's" ✅
 * "on the music video." → "in the music video." ✅
 * "On December 3 2020," → "On December 3, 2020," ✅
 * "YouTube becoming the first" → "YouTube, with them becoming the first" with the wikilink ✅
 * "and ninth music video of" → "while it was the ninth music video of" ✅

Controversy

 * "When I inquired with the music video director, it was said that there was no intention because it was simply using the image source of the collage technique." is the first statement said by [32], but you have quoted otherwise without using []; is this an error or is my translator just poor? ✅
 * Regarding the second statement, the source only says the label removed the content and "I will take care to prevent this from happening in the future." ✅

Live performances
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 * "in SM Town Live World Tour IV at" → "for SM Town Live World Tour IV at the" ✅

Track listing
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 * Good ✅

Credits and personnel
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 * Credits adapted from the liner notes of Happiness. → Credits adapted from the liner notes of "Happiness". ✅
 * Shouldn't you mention the recording studios being in Seoul? ✅
 * Target Red Velvet to Red Velvet (group) ✅
 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel ✅

Charts
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Weekly charts

 * Target World Digital Songs to World Digital Song Sales ✅

Monthly charts

 * Add on the caption that it is the August 2014 monthly chart performance for "Happiness" ✅

Release history
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 * Format → Format(s) ✅
 * Label → Label(s) ✅
 * Apart from refs, the cols should not be centered ✅

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, but this is definitely a lot better than the last time I reviewed! --K. Peake 10:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All comments on the review regarding the article have all been resolved. I'm sorry for the mistakes regarding you saying "Again" when it comes to the previous review. :) I'm working hard in improving myself on nominating and editing articles that could be listed under "GA". Also, thank you so much for the effort! I do always appreciate the effort you're giving in making these reviews! You really are the best! Hope to work with you soon once again! :) --LipaCityPH 00:26, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Fantastic job; you had made a few mistakes when adding in new info, but since those were not issues that existed at the time of review I thought it would be fine for me to copyedit the fixes in. ✅ now, plus you only missed out on one actual requested change with ref formatting so I copyedited it in. --K. Peake 07:45, 10 March 2021 (UTC)