Talk:Hard Feelings/Loveless/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 16:26, 19 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 16:26, 19 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Lead and infobox
 * For the third sentence of the first paragraph, I would replace the song’s full title with “It” for more concise language.
 * For this sentence ("Loveless" includes two samples: the first two lines of the song sample a documentary about Paul Simon's album Graceland (1986), and a sample of the transitional drum solo belonging to Phil Collins' 1981 song "In the Air Tonight" is also included.), I would see if there is a way to word it without repeating the word “sample” three times in close succession. Here is a suggestion (“Loveless” includes two samples: the first two lines of the song are taken from a documentary about Paul Simon's album Graceland (1986), and the transitional drum solo was from Phil Collins' 1981 song "In the Air Tonight".)
 * I would split the last sentence of the second paragraph into two as it runs rather long.


 * Background and development
 * Please add ALT text for the image.
 * Please link Lorde when you first introduce her in the body of the article.
 * I have a note for this sentence (Lorde revealed that this was one of the earliest tracks on the record.). I have been told in the past to avoid using the word “revealed”, particularly outside of plot summaries, as it gives a rather sensational tone. I do not find the verb necessary here, and would replace it with a more toned-down variation.
 * For this part (while riding the subways in New York), I would spell out New York City in full for clarification.
 * This is a clarification question about this sentence (Lorde confessed that she never felt "Loveless" should have been its own track.). Did she explain why she felt this way?
 * Move the link for The New York Times to this section as this is the first instance in which the newspaper is named and cited.


 * Recording and lyrics
 * Unlink New York Times here. Also include the name of the writer from the newspaper.
 * Please include the name of the writer from Uproxx.


 * Reception and promotion
 * Unlink Entertainment Weekly.
 * I am not certain about the structure of this section. The first paragraph seems to focus on the positive reviews, but the second paragraph is a little all over the place. I would move the information on the live performances into its own paragraph. The critical reviews from this paragraph include primarily mixed reviews (which works and gives the paragraph a focusing point), but I am not sure if the Anna Gaca source is necessarily a mixed or negative review. It seems to me more like a commentary on the song.


 * Credits and personnel
 * I believe that the information about the recording studios should be included in the prose of the article.


 * Final comments
 * Wonderful work with this article. It is a rather short and tight piece about the song, and it is very informative and an interesting read. Once my rather brief comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to pass this as a GA. Aoba47 (talk) 19:04, 19 February 2018 (UTC)


 * It was a bit of a challenge editing this one as someone came in and edited the article using part of your suggestions; the user removed some vital information in the credits section as well as altering the format in said section. Thank you so much! De88 (talk) 04:05, 20 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Verdict
 * Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✅ this. Aoba47 (talk) 04:11, 20 February 2018 (UTC)