Talk:Hard to Do/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 03:21, 15 January 2018 (UTC)

I'll post some comments for this shortly.  ceran  thor 03:21, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Prose
 * Why do you switch between K. Michelle and Kimberly Michelle Pate? I'd just stick to the first one throughout, as that's how I've known her in music
 * I used Kimberly Michelle Pate as that is what she is credited as in the liner notes, but I have changed it according to your suggestion as I agree that it is important to be consistent. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "It was written by Kimberly Michelle Pate, Bianca "Blush" Atterberry, Maurice Simmonds, Julian Jackson, Brian James, Janice Johnson, Raphael Saadiq, and was produced by American record producer Soundz." - Missing an "and" before Raphael Saadiq.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Michelle performed "Hard to Do" on the BET Awards 2015," - at, not on
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * ""Hard to Do" was written by Kimberly Michelle Pate, Bianca "Blush" Atterberry, Maurice Simmonds, Julian Jackson, Brian James, Janice Johnson, Raphael Saadiq,[1] and was produced by American record producer Soundz.[2]" - same problem as above
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Derek Blythe performed the guitar on the track; the vocals were produced by Atterberry, and recorded by C Travis Kr8ts, with additional assistance from Jared Lynch and the Soundz." - Why the comma after Atterberry? It disrupts the flow
 * Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * ""Hard to Do" is a soul ballad that lasts three minutes and 58 seconds;[1][5] Mike Wass of Idolator viewed the track as "retro-leaning".[5] " - Separate ideas, so the semi-colon isn't really useful here. Better as separate sentences
 * Good point. I can go a little too semi-colon happy sometimes lol. Aoba47 (talk) 03:46, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Sarah Godfrey of The Washington Post felt that the single's melody had a "slightest resemblance" to American girl group Total's single "Kissin' You" from their 1996 self-entitled album." - Better as "the" slightest resemblance, not "a"
 * Good point. Changed. Aoba47 (talk) 03:50, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Why is the title of the section "Composition" but it has nothing to do with her artistic process for making the song? I think a section header like "Content and lyrics" would be more apt
 * From my past experiences with music/song articles, the word "composition" refers to the sound of the song. I have changed it per your suggestion though. Aoba47 (talk) 03:50, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "In the video, directed by Child Basquiat.[4] Michelle wears revealing clothing while accompanied by various animals." - think there should be a comma after Basquiat
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:50, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "She performs with a zebra" - This doesn't make much sense to me... perhaps more specific detail would be helpful
 * Revised to hopefully be more clear. She just sings the song and dances while the zebra is in the same room. Aoba47 (talk) 03:50, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "Michelle performed "Hard to Do" on the BET Awards 2015," - same note as above
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 03:50, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * "The performance was noted by media outlets as ending the rivalry between Braxton and Michelle;" - This wasn't previously mentioned in the article, so it would not make sense without more context to a general reader. Add more about this
 * I have added a small sentence about the feud. Let me know if further context is needed. Aoba47 (talk) 03:58, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Sources
 * All seem reliable and consistent.
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 03:58, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Images
 * Any images of the music video or her performances would be useful. You could possibly make a valid fair use rationale for a music video screenshot, which would be non-free content.
 * I will add a screenshot from the video later today; I will choose a moment from the video that got the most critical commentary from reviews. Aoba47 (talk) 03:58, 15 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Added an image. Aoba47 (talk) 05:28, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Copyvio
 * Checks out via Earwig's tool.
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 03:58, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Formatting
 * No disambiguation links.
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 03:58, 15 January 2018 (UTC)


 * External links and references are all intact.
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 03:58, 15 January 2018 (UTC)

This looks to be in good shape. Seems a bit short, so I'll want to look into comprehensiveness a bit more, but I'm happy with its current state.  ceran  thor 03:36, 15 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed all of your comments. I believe that I have used all of the articles related to this song, but I will also look again tomorrow to see if there is any more information out there. Aoba47 (talk) 05:28, 15 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Great. I did some more looking and couldn't find anything new either. Passing now.  ceran  thor 15:01, 15 January 2018 (UTC)