Talk:Harold North/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)

Will review shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)

Prelim

 * No edit wars
 * No duplicated links (bar postnom)
 * Images correctly licensed
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

 * Link sortie
 * Link dogfight
 * Could mention in the lede that he later flies Spitfires, right now it suggests that he only flew Hurricanes
 * Don't believe nicknames need to be italicized
 * Operation Dynamo could be added to the infobox, being separate to the BoB
 * His service number (in LGs etc) can be added to infobox
 * All the above done. Zawed (talk) 08:29, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Early life

 * Link law clerk
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Barrister and solicitor are different roles, why do they have the same link?
 * In NZ, a lawyer can be both, I have several colleagues who are. The barrister article mentions this in the last paragraph of the lead. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Link Wellington
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Why was his acceptance provisional?
 * I believe it is because it was contingent on him passing flight training. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * You link the "civilian flying school" to RAF Prestwick which doesn't immediately make sense
 * I doublechecked the source on this and it turns I was being a bit too literal. It was a reserve flying school, not a civilian one. Have rephrased. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * You've left the "RAF" before Uxbridge, which I think is against your usual practice
 * Fixed. Zawed (talk) 08:35, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * "More advanced flying training followed" Why not include location(s) for this training too?
 * I *think* it was still at Hullavington, but the source isn't explicit on this. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 3 October 2022 (UTC)

Second World War

 * Link Second World War
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * "The squadron was based at Scapa Flow" I was a little confused when reading this (aren't they at Acklington?); suggest rewording sentence to begin with the date of move
 * Rephrased as suggested. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Link Royal Navy
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * "the following month it was back at Tangmere" The article does not make it obvious that the squadron had moved away from Tangmere in this period, which is what I assume this means
 * Rephrased. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Suggest adding an actual mention of the Battle of Britain to main text
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Not clear what "a section" would be - is this a flight?
 * Linked - there is a section in the linked article for usage in air forces. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Possibly useful to link bailed out
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Link perspex
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Did North see any operational flying with 96 Sqn?
 * Probably but the sources don't explicitly say. I've add mention of a course that he attended during his time there.


 * Link acting
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Link sorties
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Practice suggests you should add what bombers he was escorting, if possible
 * Sources don't provide this info. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Is Marquise this Marquise?
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Could be useful to expand on the tally uncertainty - which kills are the dodgy ones?
 * I have attempted to clarify. Zawed (talk) 09:21, 3 October 2022 (UTC)