Talk:Harold Oliver (Australian footballer)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:58, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I will be reviewing this against the GA criteria as part of a GAN sweep. I'll leave some comments soon. JAG UAR   15:58, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

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Checking against the GA criteria

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Can Australian rules football be linked to anything? Is it any different to regular football?
 * "He was the son of Cornish immigrant parents James Oliver and Sarah Mill" - remove 'parents' and just write He was the son of Cornish immigrants James Oliver and Sarah Mill
 * "After being close to retiring from the game after World War I he returned to captain Port Adelaide to the 1921 SAFL premiership" - link World War I here
 * "This is despite never having won the Magarey Medal, somewhat a result of his career being interrupted by World War I" unlink it here
 * I think the first three sections could be merged into one section, or have it as three level 3 headers under one level 2 header per MOS guidelines
 * Move the quote box to the right in the Port Adelaide Football Club (1910–1922) section
 * The latter half of the Port Adelaide Football Club (1910–1922) section should be merged into one big paragraph.
 * "He kicked 28 goals in the 1912 SAFL season.[17] At the end of the 1912 SAFL season he would be awarded his second consecutive Port Adelaide Best and Fairest." - unsourced
 * "In 1913 Port Adelaide won the 1913 SAFL premiership and the 1913 Championship of Australia by defeating VFL premier Fitzroy." - unsourced
 * "War years in Berri (1916–1919)" section unsourced
 * "One of his close friends William Powell sent him a letter during his time serving that included a short paragraph" - bad grammar
 * "and that others were exclaiming "OLIVER" whilst playing the Australian game." - why is Oliver in capital letters?
 * The Reputation section has choppy prose and should be merged into one big paragraph for a better flow
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * No original research found.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Infobox image needs a caption
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Infobox image needs a caption
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

I'm really sorry to do this but it doesn't meet the GA criteria at the moment. There are some issues which stand in the way, including unsourced claims, organisation, and a few prose issues. I'd be happy to review this again once all of the issues are addressed. JAG UAR   20:04, 30 November 2016 (UTC)