Talk:Harpya/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gerald Waldo Luis (talk · contribs) 01:45, 29 November 2021 (UTC)

Hi there! Will be reviewing this article. Looks pretty neat at first glance, expect a full review in several hours.  Gerald WL  01:45, 29 November 2021 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

 * There's no need for reference 2, as Servais' position as writer-director has been cited in the body, and leads shouldn't have citations whenever possible.
 * Link short film
 * Other than that, everything here looks good.

Plot, themes

 * "...finds a man strangling a woman in a fountain." Previously there's already "the cries of a woman" and there's only one woman in this film, so it should be "the woman in a fountain."
 * Linking chips is WP:OVERLINK.
 * "Servais' 1968 film Siren" --> "Servais' Siren (1968)".

Production

 * "He made his first animated short film in 1959"-- link animation and short film.
 * "He envisioned it as a comedy horror film"-- link comedy horror.
 * It was linked above as "horror parody", but this looks better.
 * "...about a harpy, a winged, female monster from Greek mythology." I don't think we need this definition of harpy here since it's already stated in the plot section; if you feel like this extension is useful you can put it in the plot, but it shouldn't be here as it's repetition.
 * "Harpies are for example known from the Argonautica" --> "Harpies are for example known from the Greek poem Argonautica"
 * "...traditional cartoon"-- link Traditional animation.
 * "the spontaneous to visuals close to interwar"-- is this referring to Interwar period? Or other stuff?
 * Yes, I reworded it and added a link.
 * Link frames per second.

Release

 * Above at the infobox there's ref 1 for the 9 minutes claim. To make the lead citation-free, I'd suggest modifying the second sentence to "With a running time of nine minutes,[1] it was the third time one of Servais' short films was selected for the festival; he had previously participated with Goldframe in 1969 and Operation X-70 in 1972.[27]"

Reception

 * "...and Wim de Poorter of Ons Erfdeel"-- remove "Wim de" and "of Ons Erfdeel" as it has been established in Production who Poorter is and where he worked for.
 * Link Phantasmagoria.
 * "...the director's most individual film"-- you mean individualist? Or...? Because individual means "single; separate" nnd "of or for a particular person"
 * Changed to "unique", which is the word used in the source.
 * "1979 Annecy festival --> "1979 Annecy International Animation Film Festival".

Legacy

 * Link film school
 * Other than that, looks all good!


 * Thank you very much, ! I think I have addressed everything above. Let me know if anything else is needed. Ffranc (talk) 10:24, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
 * awesome! One last thing to note, at the sources section, I'd suggest linking CRC Press and Les 400 coups, as well as the locations in the =location parameters. All while I review MOS to make sure I'm not missing anything.  Gerald WL  12:26, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Linked everything I could in the source section now. Ffranc (talk) 12:42, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
 * And that wraps the GAN for this article! Probably one of the fastest (but still thorough) GANs I've reviewed. It's comprehensive, written well article for a masterpiece.  Gerald  WL  13:59, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the fast review! Ffranc (talk) 14:23, 29 November 2021 (UTC)