Talk:Harry Crerar/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 01:49, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

Will review this week. Hog Farm Talk 01:49, 18 October 2021 (UTC)

I made several copy edits, revert anything you don't agree with Placing on hold. Hog Farm Talk 03:15, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "During the The Second World War" - duplicate the
 * ✅ Deleted. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Vienna to study the manufacture of Incandescent light bulbs." - I'm not sure that Incandescent should be capitalized
 * ✅ Decapitated. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "SORA) by Major Don A, White" - is the comma intentional
 * ✅ No just my lousy typing. Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "First Canadian Army became operational Normandy at noon on 23 July" - missing a word?
 * ✅ Added missing word. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Crerar immediately clashed his Crocker" - ?
 * ✅ Changed to "with". Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "the Crocker and the commander of the British Second Army" - ?
 * ✅ Deleted "the". Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * " Keller was seriously wounded in an attack by American bombers on 8 August, and was succeeded by Major-General Daniel Spry ten days later." - Surely if it was the Americans, it would have been an accident, so attack seems like a weird word choice
 * ✅ Deleted "in an attack". Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Order of Leopold seems to only be in infobox, as do the two Croix de Guerres, the Order of the White Lion, and the Order of Kutuzov
 * ✅ Couldn't find the Order of Kutuzov. It's supposed to have been gazetted on 4 October 1945, but the Canada Gazette is not available online, and it isn't in his medals list. So removed that one for now. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Croix Croix de Guerre 1940 with Palm (Belgium)" - Is the double Croix intentional?
 * ✅ Mais non. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Sourcing looks good.
 * All points addressed. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  05:19, 20 October 2021 (UTC)