Talk:Harry East/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:31, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Will review for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 20:31, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Will need East's nationality mentioned in the first sentence
 * "A St. Louis native," - think the city can be wikilinked to the relevant article

Early life

 * "In his book The Cooperstown Chronicles, lists East's birthplace as St. Louis, Missouri, where East would spend most of his life." - repetition of "East"
 * You can also mention the year the book was published if it is appropriate

Baltimore Orioles

 * "East's only Major League Baseball (MLB) game came on June 17, 1882, at Sportsman's Park in St. Louis, though East played for the visiting Baltimore Orioles as they competed against the St. Louis Browns of the fledgling American Association." - repetition of the player's surname

Minor league baseball

 * "he continued to play semipro baseball through 1889," - semi-professional
 * Semipro is actually a common term; it never seems to be spelled out to semiprofessional anywhere I see it. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 00:49, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Later years

 * "East would later become a patient, checking into the Alexian Brothers' Hospital in May 1905. He was suffering from melancholia" - maybe merge the second sentence with the first but being more concise?
 * "On June 2, he committed suicide, using a straight razor to slit his throat." - thedeadballera.com doesn't state the date or what he used to slit his throat so another reference that mentions all this information is needed here
 * The book does mention it, so added that as a reference. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 00:50, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 20:48, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
 * Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 06:55, 3 July 2021 (UTC)