Talk:Harvey Perlman

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: LawrenceSeminarioRomero, Katiethompson8.

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 * For page Harvey Perlman 's move history, see https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Wikipedia:Requested_moves/Technical_requests&oldid=713978763 Anthony Appleyard (talk) 22:28, 6 April 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
I like how simple and straightforward this article is. Although it is a biography but you did not over explain this figure like how some writters does. I do feel the early life and career section intersects with each other, like they are somewhat similar. Especially the part regarding his university and education. And it would be nice to know how did he win those awards, for example like what did he do to win the Co-reporter for the 'Restatement of Unfair Competition' award.

Amyaph (talk) 07:14, 7 April 2016 (UTC)Amyaph

I agreed with your first peer review! I thought your introduction could just be one sentence, it seemed a little repetitive. And leave out that he is stepping down. You should maybe move that fact to the Career section. And then the grammatical errors that were mentioned as well.

I thought that you had a good amount of references and further readings. Also, you linked to a lot of other Wikipedia articles which was good too.

Katiethompson8 (talk) 15:09, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
In general, the topic for this Wikipedia article is good.

Here are some of my recommendations for fixing this article:

First, I think it would be a good idea to fix the introduction for this article. Perhaps, the introduction should be just one sentence:

Example: "Harvey Perlman is a college administrator and the incumbent chancellor of the University of Nebraska at Lincoln."

The current introduction consists of information that does not need to be mentioned right away; it would be better if additional subsections for this information were created.

Also, it is not a good idea to mention in the introduction that Chancellor Perlman will step down from his position.

Second, avoid being repetitive.

e.g.

Introduction: Harvey Perlman is a college administrator and the chancellor of the University of Nebraska at Lincoln. He is the 19th chancellor of the University. He has been the chancellor of the University of Nebraska at Lincoln since mid 2000's.

Career: On July 16, 2000 Harvey became the Interim Chancellor of the University of Nebraska. On April 1, 2001 Harvey was named the Chancellor of the University of Nebraska. He is the 19th Chancellor of the University.[4]

Finally, look over to make sure there is no grammatical errors.

e.g.

Early life and education "While is school Harvey was the editor in chief..."

Above all, I believe you are on the right track in shaping this article.

Excellent job!

LawrenceSeminarioRomero (talk) 02:08, 28 March 2016 (UTC)