Talk:Hasan ibn Ali/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Shushugah (talk · contribs) 14:08, 5 January 2022 (UTC)

Greetings, I will start reviewing this article for GA status. I am looking forward to working with you. Please stay tuned! ~ 🦝 Shushugah (he/him • talk) 14:08, 5 January 2022 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * It is extremely difficult to follow, because there many large run on sentences, few paragraph breaks and new names are introduced without context. The tone is not always written in WP:Encyclopedic tone. I've marked where it would be helpful to clarify.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * As a whole, the sources seem to be of high quality and generally reasonably sourced.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * While the prose style makes it difficult to follow, I don't think any of the information is excessively detailed. However, I am unsure if some major aspects are missing, for example the Sunni view of Hasan is notably missing from the different views of Hasan, or other religions, particularly Christianity, which is briefly mentioned. If it's implicitly assumed from the general depictions of Hasan in the Qu'ran and Hadiths, this needs to be made more clear, especially considering his primary importance in Shia Islam.On the other hand, I am unsure what this even has to do with Hasan, other than being one of the children of Ali/Fatimah: Surah Al-Insan, attribute its revelation to Ali and Fatima and the story of the illness of their child or children and a vow for their recovery., and other examples like this.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Generally neutral, though some comments like "he's criticized most heavily by western scholars" make me wonder what non western scholars think? If non Islamic scholar is intended, then state it as such.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Images are freely licensed
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * This is a Vital articles/Level/5 article and has potential to become a GA and FA some day, but serious copy editing is needed to make the prose more accessible. The lede currently does not adequately describe the entire article. The lede is typically 4 paragraphs, and this is two, but with the 2nd being excessively long and details heavily the Hasan–Muawiya treaty at the expense of other aspect of Hasan's life/prominence in Islam. Despite finding and standardizing multiple spelling of Hasan, no mention of spelling variations in the lede is mentioned either. The section "Views in Islam" should be renamed to "Representation in Islam", since this is not about HIS views.Given the complexity of the issues mentioned, while a very strong article, with strong potential and strong sources available, I don't think this can be fixed within a week, so I am marking this as a failed review. I am open to be contacted for further feedback/follow up questions and a future review.
 * Thanks for taking the time to review. Based on first glance, the issues don't seem too great. Maybe they could be resolved in 2 weeks? Instead of failing this, would you be willing to put it on hold instead? I know 7 days is the standard wait time but the advantage of "hold" would be that since you've read the article it will be a lot easier for you to determine if the issues have been fixed than for someone new to come in and review the article from scratch. VR talk 23:58, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
 * @Vice regent absolutely! Happy to give a two week holding period! Thanks for asking! ~ 🦝 Shushugah (he/him • talk) 00:01, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Lemme ping a few folks to help here: (the nominator), some who have been active on the article's talk page:, , . And finally,  (who can maybe dig up sources on the Sunni view).VR talk 00:17, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * To be honest I'm rather skeptical that the outstanding issues here will be fixed in two weeks, unless all of those pinged above go to work on it right now. But then every improvement is more than welcome, and whether it leads to GA status or not is less important. Anyway, I'm posting here to draw attention to the fact that the lacking coverage of the Sunni view indeed is a major gap in the article. The article is only on my watch list because it gets regularly disrupted by IPs who try to frame Hasan as the fifth Rightly-Guided (Rashid) caliph without adequate sourcing (the same at List of caliphs). The concept of Rightly-Guided caliphs is essentially Sunni, and though historians do certainly not reckon Hasan among 'the' Rightly-Guided caliphs (in scholarly parlance, this exclusively refers to Abu Bakr, Umar, Uthman and Ali), there appears to be some tradition among some medieval Sunni scholars of supporting Hasan as some kind of rightful successor (=caliph) to the prophet. It would be really nice to have some well-sourced information on this, since clearly a lot of people who are reading this article are looking for that. ☿ Apaugasma  ( talk  ☉) 04:32, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi all, I'd be happy to work on this article. Haven't carefully read the review yet but eventually, I can perhaps go over the text and then post comments + proposed edits on the talk page... Albertatiran (talk) 04:49, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Dear, I'd be glad to share resources on this, some in English and several others in Urdu. You can locate a plethora of resources published by Taha Karaan's Mahajjah Institute at mahajjah.com and I can share others over email. I'm sorry that I can not personally help on this article, subject to my ongoing semester exams at the university. Thanks. ─ The Aafī   (talk)|undefined  09:10, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure exactly which sources you have in mind here, but given the religious nature of the website you link to, and just for clarity's sake, I feel I should mention that we absolutely need independent, secular, academic, secondary sources. Nothing directly published by a religious Islamic institute qualifies in this context. ☿ Apaugasma  ( talk  ☉) 15:57, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I second that. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 17:22, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I have to disagree with the reviewer's view on broadness criteria. Broadness is not akin to FA comprehensiveness. It requires moderate coverage of the most important aspects of the topic. In Shi'ism, Hasan is regarded as an Imam, a divinely appointed religio-political leader of the Muslim Empire and legitimate successor of Muhammad; hence such detail on the Shi'a view is warranted. In Sunnism, he is just a caliph and Muhammad's grandson. As such, Sunni position does not warrant a treatment anywhere near to the treatment of the Shi'a view. EI2, Iranica, and other sources thus don't mention the Sunni view at all. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 17:22, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I Agree. Above, I was unduly putting my own wishes for this article before the review, but detailing the Sunni view is in fact a very difficult challenge which should not be required for a GA. What does require more work though is the encyclopedic focus: currently, the article is too much a collection of facts and stories, and not enough a discussion and analysis of historical events and their legacy. The relevant GA criterion is 3b: . To qualify for this, it needs a lot of trimming and rewriting. I think that what the reviewer mentions under (1), i.e., that it is difficult to follow and that it needs WP:Encyclopedic tone, actually falls under (3b). ☿ Apaugasma  ( talk  ☉) 03:05, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the ping. Ready to help with improving the page. @folks: suggest taking a look at and . --  M h hossein   talk 03:12, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the ping. Ready to help with improving the page. @folks: suggest taking a look at and . --  M h hossein   talk 03:12, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello. Thanks to the article is ready to be reviewed again. Ghazaalch (talk) 14:34, 31 January 2022 (UTC)

Issue number 1
Thank you very much. Can you handle the copy editing issues and reorganize the lede? I'll try to modify other issues with the help of others.Ghazaalch (talk) 14:09, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello. I placed a copy editing request here. For the time being I have nothing else to add to the article and I think it is time to edit it.Ghazaalch (talk) 06:11, 11 January 2022 (UTC)

Issue number 3
Hello Can you expand on this section with the help of  to deal with the issue number 3 mentioned by the reviewer above? It is important to use only reliable sources as this section is a controversial one.Ghazaalch (talk) 15:32, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * To begin, I wonder if there is a specific source (or sources) that, in your view, is essential to a discussion about the Sunni view of Hasan (besides Madelung). Thanks! Albertatiran (talk) 16:32, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry, but unfortunately I'm not at all familiar with the specific sources, and have neither the time nor the inclination to get familiar with them at this moment. However, as I commented above, I was in fact mistaken to ask for coverage of the Sunni view, which would only be fitting for an FA review. I'm sorry about that! I suggest focusing on GA criterion 3b, which I do think is a major problem here. ☿ Apaugasma  ( talk  ☉) 03:05, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
 * No worries, thanks for the follow-up. Albertatiran (talk) 10:01, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

I added some new information from Encyclopaedia Islamica, and from a Persian version of a book by Ali al-Sallabi. I guess this is the English copy of the book and might be of some use. may be able to introduce some more sources.

And I guess the information I added needs to be shortened a little. Ghazaalch (talk) 03:44, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Second opinion requested in the hopes of finding reviewer to take over
Regrettably, Shushugah has been inactive of late and unresponsive to queries, so I've changed the nomination status to "2nd opinion" in the hopes of finding a new reviewer to take over the review. Thank you to whoever steps up. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:19, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
 * I had conducted a pre-nomination review of the article and made (before as well as after the review) some minor edits here and there. Am I allowed to take over this review? -- AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 19:06, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
 * AhmadLX, apologies for not getting back to you sooner. If you're familiar with the GA criteria and how to apply them in a review, and your edits to the article are minor and there are not a lot of them, then by all means take over. Thank you for offering. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:33, 4 April 2022 (UTC)

Thank you for the offering. Looking forward to your review. Ghazaalch (talk) 12:08, 14 April 2022 (UTC)

Review by AhmadLX
Images
 * File:A Portrait of 'Ali, Hasan, Husayn, and the Sufi Leader Nur 'Ali Shah Ni 'matullahi.jpg : US tag needed.
 * File:The Prophet, 'Ali, Husayn and Hasan in Paradise; 'Uthman, 'Umar and Abu Bakr are in the foreground. Miniature from a 17th century manuscript of Khavarnama, a poem on the deeds of 'Ali; Punjab, 1686 (BL).jpg : ditto
 * File:Baghi tomb.jpg : this as well
 * File:Coffin of Imam 'Ali, Folio from a Falnama (The Book of Omens) of Ja'far al-Sadiq.jpg : this one too


 * File:The first three Shiite Imams- Ali with his sons Hasan and Husayn, illustration from a Qajar manuscript, Iran, 1837-38 (gouache on paper).jpg : The source link does not verify the license.
 * File:Coin from the time of Hassan ibn Ali.jpg : Almost certainly not "own work"; the license is invalid
 * File:Unknown Artist Imam 'Ali with Hasan and Husayn Painting With Calligraphy Persian, 19th century.jpg : The source link dead
 * File:HassanSVG.svg : license invalid

Hello. I am not so familiar with the issues cited above by the reviewer. Would you have the time to help me fix the images? Ghazaalch (talk) 15:51, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Hey Ghazaalch, thanks for the ping. Would be happy to help. What do you mean by "US tag needed"? Because the works cited as such by you are apparently in PD. --  M h hossein   talk 06:01, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
 * Works originating in countries other than the US are to have tags for both the source country and the US. Please see Commons. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 19:20, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
 * If that's your sole objection, then you're kindly invited to read the licenses more carefully. The files you tagged as 'US tag' are allowed in US. Actually, "The official position taken by the Wikimedia Foundation is that "faithful reproductions of two-dimensional public domain works of art are public domain". This photographic reproduction is therefore also considered to be in the public domain in the United States." -- M h hossein   talk 05:10, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
 * What you quote above addresses the issue whether pictures of public domain 2D works are also in public domain themselves. The point I made above is different. Being PD in one country doesn't make anything PD in the US by default. For that, explicit tag is needed. If no justification regarding the copyright status in the US is provided, these images will have to be removed. <i style="color:teal">AhmadLX</i>-(<i style="color:brown">Wikiposta</i>) 10:57, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
 * What kind of more "explicit" tags other than "This photographic reproduction is therefore also considered to be in the public domain in the United States" are you asking for? If you are still unsure you may ask Wikimedia Commons admins other than me. I am done here. -- M h hossein   talk 05:10, 30 April 2022 (UTC)

Sources
 * واکنش مراجع عظام تقلید به سریال الاسباط : non-Rs; remove
 * Fayazi, Kia. Critique of Mokhtarnameh serial : ditto
 * Referring to the Prophet as (master) : ditto
 * Paktchi, Ahmad; Tareh, Masoud; Haj-Manouchehri, Faramarz; Masoudi Arani, Abdullah (2013) : as above
 * Jafarian, Rasul (1999) and Jafarian, Rasul (2003) : this one too
 * Egypt Independent : fine for GA, but won't work if you plan for FA.
 * Veccia Vaglieri, L. (2022a), Veccia Vaglieri, L. (2022b)., Veccia Vaglieri, L. (2022c). Wrong years. Correct per respective EI2 volumes, and provide full bibliographic data.
 * Ibn Rashid, Mamar (2014): Translator and editor (Sean Anthony) missing; Either format as Anthony, Sean (2014). "The Expeditions: An early biography of Muhammad by Ma'mar ibn Rashid according to the recension of Abd al-Razaq al-San'ani" or add editor and translator parameters to the template as is.
 * Netton, Ian Richard (2013). Encyclopaedia of Islam : Which article?
 * Glassé, Cyril (2001). The new encyclopedia of Islam : Which article?
 * Order sources alphabetically using last name.
 * The Princeton Encyclopedia of Islamic Political Thought: cite the article and its author(s).
 * Encyclopædia of Islamic Civilisation and Religion: Netton, Ian Richard is the editor. Name the article's author in the author parameter and Netton in the editor parameter. Give the article's page range.
 * Vaglieri, L. Veccia (1991). Bearman, p. (ed.). Al-Djamal (Second ed.): Second edition of what?

MOS
 * Ahl al-Bayt → ahl al-bayt; italicize
 * Ahl al-Kisa → ahl al-kisa; italicize
 * Abū Ḥanīfa Dīnawarī : drop the diacritics
 * rāshidūn : ditto
 * ismah → isma
 * Dar al-Ifta' al-Misriyya → Dar al-Ifta al-Misriyya
 * Jamiʽ al-Tirmidhi → Jami'a al-Tirmidhi
 * Sunna → sunna; italicize

Misc.
 * Abu Huraira → Abu Hurayra
 * taqiya → taqiyya
 * Quotes like "Go to your uncle ... I shall pledge allegiance to you." should be followed immediately by a citation.
 * ahl al-bayt link missing; ahl al-kisa linked more than once.
 * Mubahala and mubahala
 * ( What do you mean by this?)
 * This means that at some places you start the term with capital M and at some place you start with small m. <i style="color:teal">AhmadLX</i>-(<i style="color:brown">Wikiposta</i>) 10:57, 28 April 2022 (UTC)


 * Some historians you introduce (e.g. Ibn Isfandiyar), some you don't (e.g. Tabari, Madelung)
 * "Hasan received 5,000 dirhams as the state revenue." He received "pension from the state revenue" and not the state revenue itself.

Regarding File:Unknown Artist Imam 'Ali with Hasan and Husayn Painting With Calligraphy Persian, 19th century.jpg. The review said that the source link dead. This problem has been fixed. -- Toddy1 (talk) 10:50, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

Thank you. The problems mentioned above by are fixed, except for the Images section that still don't know what should be done. Ghazaalch (talk) 09:00, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

AhmadLX, since you did take over this review, I've belatedly changed the nomination status from "2nd opinion" to "on review". Please let me know if it should be "on hold". Where does the review stand at the present time? Thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 01:36, 27 May 2022 (UTC)

New reviewer needed
AhmadLX will not be able to return to complete the review, so a new reviewer is needed to take over and do their own checks of the article against the GA criteria. I've set the nomination again to "second opinion" status. Thank you to whoever takes this on. BlueMoonset (talk) 00:41, 12 June 2022 (UTC)


 * I'm happy to step in and will take on the vaunted and daunting "third opinion" role. Will complete this review tomorrow, one way or the other; sorry you've had to wait, ! —Ganesha811 (talk) 04:54, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

Thank you. Ghazaalch (talk) 07:13, 29 June 2022 (UTC)

Thank you again Ganesha811. Can you give more details on what needs to be done? Ghazaalch (talk) 09:36, 30 June 2022 (UTC)


 * I will, don't worry - just didn't have time to get to everything yesterday. More comments are forthcoming! —Ganesha811 (talk) 12:29, 30 June 2022 (UTC)

Thank you Ganesha811. BTW I forgot to make some edits to the article before asking you to review it. I am done now. Sorry for the inconvenience. I will be waiting for your more comments.Ghazaalch (talk) 09:53, 1 July 2022 (UTC)


 * The Jaafarian source has already been deemed unreliable (see article talk). I'm sure there are better alternatives. <b style="color: #4682B4;">Wiqi</b><sup style="color: #99BADD;">(55) 12:36, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * , I see the discussion about the Jaafarian source on the talk page, but I don't see where it is currently cited on the article; could you be more specific? —Ganesha811 (talk) 14:01, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * You might have reverted the changes again before I looked at it; taking a second look now. —Ganesha811 (talk) 14:11, 1 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Yup, I reverted to the stable version. The Jafarian material was only inserted yesterday even though it was removed previously per talk page discussions. <b style="color: #4682B4;">Wiqi</b><sup style="color: #99BADD;">(55) 08:02, 2 July 2022 (UTC)

Rasul Jafarian is currently the Professor of the Department of History at the University of Tehran which is among the top university of the world. The first reviewer had no problem with him being cited in the article, the second reviewer changed his mind in considering him as a reliable source. And now we have the third reviewer that might have another view. The same thing can be said about the Encyclopaedia Islamica which you reverted it too.Ghazaalch (talk) 06:30, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Jafarian is an obscure non-English source that most readers wouldn't be able to verify/utilize. I've never seen any reliable source that cites him for info on al-Hasan and early Islamic figures. Instead, we need to direct readers to high-quality sources written in English and there are plenty. <b style="color: #4682B4;">Wiqi</b><sup style="color: #99BADD;">(55) 08:02, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Non-English is not a problem per WP:NOENG, especially if there is not an equivalent English-language source. Obscurity is harder to measure. This is an important issue for the article's neutrality and stability; I will do some research and make up my own mind, since right now I don't know which of you I tend to agree with. —Ganesha811 (talk) 12:36, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
 * , I know you have some interest and knowledge in this area, and I see you've edited Jaafarian's page before. Do you have any thoughts on Jaafarian's reliability and usefulness as a source for this article, after reading the dispute above and on the talk page? —Ganesha811 (talk) 12:41, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
 * What I meant by obscure is not cited in any reliable source relevant to this topic. There is also no indication of meeting the requirement of wp:rs: a reputation for fact-checking and accuracy. Political History of Islam was published by the Ministry of Culture and Islamic Guidance, not an academic or reputable publisher. <b style="color: #4682B4;">Wiqi</b><sup style="color: #99BADD;">(55) 18:03, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure, Rasul Jafarian is cited in a few high quality WP:RS, but that's more regarding later (Shia) Islam in modern Iran, such as the The Safavid World by Rudi Matthee and Isfahan and its Palaces: Statecraft, Shi`ism and the Architecture of Conviviality in Early Modern Iran by Sussan Babaie. We also have to remember that Rasul Jafarian is a cleric, just like the current leaders of the country, who are notable for their revisionist views and disregard of human rights, particularly against non-Shias. Perhaps we're better off using other sources in early Islamic history, which we fortunately don't lack in. That's obviously not saying that Iranian historians aren't reliable - the afromentioned Encyclopaedia Islamica, one of the leading WP:RS in this field, is mainly written by Iranian historians. --HistoryofIran (talk) 18:50, 2 July 2022 (UTC)
 * This should perhaps have been taken to WP:RSN some time ago, but the fact that we're dealing here with a religious cleric publishing with the ministry of 'Islamic Guidance' of a theocracy are two huge red flags for me. I do not believe that a source like this can ever be WP:INDEPENDENT, i.e. be a source that has no vested interest in a given Wikipedia topic and that can cover the topic from a disinterested perspective. As Wiqi55 said, there are plenty of high-quality sources on this topic, so there's not really an excuse to rely on someone as susceptible to religious bias as Jafarian. ☿ Apaugasma  ( talk  ☉) 13:25, 3 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you all for your thoughts. It's clear there is plenty of scope here for an in-depth discussion that will not be easily resolved. This means,, that it will be tough for this article to pass GA review while issues of source reliability and neutrality are still under active dispute. —Ganesha811 (talk) 13:43, 3 July 2022 (UTC)

So instead of Jafarian I would use the aforementioned Encyclopaedia Islamica, that as said, is one of the leading WP:RS in this field. Ghazaalch (talk) 14:04, 3 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Is the article currently in a place you're happy with in terms of sourcing? i.e. should I continue my review with the article as-is. or are you planning changes to the sources used? —Ganesha811 (talk) 12:28, 4 July 2022 (UTC)

Yes. You could continue your review. I won't use new sources, Ghazaalch (talk) 03:45, 5 July 2022 (UTC)

It may take a day for me to add new information from Encyclopaedia Islamica, and you can continue your review from tomorrow. Thank you for your time. Ghazaalch (talk) 05:19, 5 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Ok, please ping me when you're done. Thanks. —Ganesha811 (talk) 17:58, 5 July 2022 (UTC)

I am done. Ghazaalch (talk) 07:23, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

U.S. tag needed
Hello Iskandar. Do you have time to deal with issues mentioned in the table here, part 6a. I am not so familiar with the issues. Here they are:


 * File:HassanSVG.svg should be removed, or more detailed metadata is needed, such as a US copyright tag, an artist, etc.
 * File:Coffin of Imam 'Ali, Folio from a Falnama (The Book of Omens) of Ja'far al-Sadiq.jpg needs a US public domain copyright tag
 * File:Baghi tomb.jpg is incorrectly licensed - it was clearly not published by the copyright holder (who would have taken it in 1926) and so needs a US public domain copyright tag.
 * File:The first three Shiite Imams- Ali with his sons Hasan and Husayn, illustration from a Qajar manuscript, Iran, 1837-38 (gouache on paper).jpg needs a US public domain copyright tag. Ghazaalch (talk) 13:08, 5 July 2022 (UTC)


 * @Ghazaalch: I've resolved the third and fourth. The second seems fine already? The origins of the first are potentially too mysterious to tag as public domain. Iskandar323 (talk) 13:41, 5 July 2022 (UTC)

Thank you. Would you tell us what should be done about the first one, also the second? Ghazaalch (talk) 07:35, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * File:Coffin of Imam 'Ali, Folio from a Falnama (The Book of Omens) of Ja'far al-Sadiq.jpg has now been removed from the article, so no worries there. I agree that File:HassanSVG.svg is probably not public domain - it should be removed from the article/template. —Ganesha811 (talk) 11:35, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

I cannot find the File:HassanSVG.svg in the article. Ghazaalch (talk) 14:56, 6 July 2022 (UTC)


 * It's used in Template:Hasan ibn Ali. —Ganesha811 (talk) 15:31, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

There is currently a discussion on deletion of the image here. Ghazaalch (talk) 06:21, 7 July 2022 (UTC)

Auto-hide
Thank you again. Could you also auto-hide the templates cited in the table above, part 1b ? Ghazaalch (talk) 07:35, 6 July 2022 (UTC)

We could keep them as they are if it is not a big deal. I think they are very helpful to the readers who are not familiar with Shia Islam and Sunni Islam and the different between them. Ghazaalch (talk) 07:41, 8 July 2022 (UTC)


 * I don't mind the templates being in the article, but they should not be auto-expanded; they take up too much space and distract the reader from the body of the article as currently constituted. —Ganesha811 (talk) 12:10, 8 July 2022 (UTC)

OK. So I will ask someone else to do it for me. Ghazaalch (talk) 05:53, 9 July 2022 (UTC)

Failing the review due to prose issues
The density of prose issues (we haven't even gotten to the meat of the article yet!) suggests that this article is a long way from meeting GA Criteria #1 (well-written). I think I will have to fail it for now, regretfully, and encourage you to copyedit the article carefully. The writing is clunky and the chronology is often confusing; sometimes it is hard to tell why sentences or phrases are joined together, or who is doing what. The text also does not provide enough context for contradictions among sources. You could seek help from the Guild of Copyeditors - there are some great folks there who are good at improving articles like this. There's a lot of good material here and we've made real improvements; I encourage you not to be discouraged by this but view it as an opportunity to keep developing the article. —Ganesha811 (talk) 14:14, 10 July 2022 (UTC)