Talk:Haskell canoe/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:25, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:25, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * The lead could be expanded from just three sentences to more about when it was stopped being built.

Background

 * Briefly describe who Henry L. Haskell is to the uninitated


 * "Haskell made his business cards from pieces of the waterproof plywood which read," - This needs to be cited to a reliable source


 * Think the text of the business cards should be more centrally aligned with each other

Construction

 * "meaning king of the water." - in what language?
 * ✅ - removed, as I can not get access now to micro-filmed newspaper because the library is closed. I reworded that first paragraph accordingly.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:56, 8 October 2020 (UTC)


 * "The glue Haskell invented[5] was with co-developer H.F. John and made from dried cow's blood." - early or mid-sentence citations are not needed. Should be moved to the end of the sentence


 * "It was subjected to various tests to make sure" - ensure


 * "After getting good results from these experiments and tests, then the glue was used in the making of the plywood that constructed the boats." - the glue was employed in the making of the plywood used in the construction of the boats.


 * "three-sixteenths of an inch thick." - the convert template could be used on the text indiciated in bold


 * "and then pressed into a canoe form by a machine." - what type of machine?


 * "The final construction was to" - final process of construction


 * "The name of the manufacturer was the Haskell Boat Company and was an organization under the management of the Haskell Manufacturing Company." - Haskell Boat Company, which was an organization managed by the Haskell Manufacturing Company.


 * "to a 17 foot long canoe instead of the original 16 foot boat." - the convert templates would be better off used on the text denoted in bold


 * "They were no longer made after 1934." - what was the reason for no longer building the canoes?
 * ✅ - removed.

Marketing

 * "One testimonial of 1930 from a tour guide of Kodiak Island in Alaska said that he used this canoe with much success." - much success with what exactly?
 * ✅ bear hunting