Talk:Haya people/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:10, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I will post my comments soon. Cheers, Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 08:10, 22 April 2020 (UTC)


 * No copyvio concerns, dablinks, broken external links
 * Quite a few duplinks, check them using this tool
 * fixed


 * Sourcing and citations: Decent and well-formatted overall. A few things:
 * In refs (like #3), basically foreign language sources, include the |trans-title= and |language= parameters
 * not sure I can or should translate the Swahili titles, but I can add the language parameter
 * Okay if you are not sure of the translations then just add the language parameter
 * I see a few lines at the end of some paragraphs that lack inline citations.
 * working on this


 * Comments on prose
 * The lead should be expanded to at least 2 or 3 good paragraphs summarizing all the major aspects of the article
 * I've expanded the lede - not sure it needs additional expansion since the article itself isn't that long, but let me know what you think
 * No, the lead needs to be expanded way more (to three paras in my opinion), look at MOS:LEADLENGTH. And the overall article has not been summarized well in the lead. Sainsf  (t · c)  18:46, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Citations should not be there in the lead. All facts in the lead must be mentioned in the main body
 * working on this


 * In places the foreign terms have not been italicized
 * fixed


 * the term Bahaya (fisher-people) Which language does it come from? Say something like (xyz for 'fisher-people') where xyz is the language.
 * fixed


 * What is "AD C"?
 * fixed


 * Maybe link iron smelting
 * linked


 * In the history section, the first para which does not come under any subheading should ideally go into Early history. It is not something before early history after all, or a summary of the section.
 * moved as requested


 * Not sure why 'century' should be abbreviated to 'c.'
 * that's pretty standard in archaeology but I've changed it


 * A link for 'Oral history' would be good, I did not get it at first.
 * fixed


 * Link Tanganyika .. preferably mention its connection to the modern day Tanzania
 * linked


 * New Moon ceremonies Shouldn't new moon be in sentence case?
 * fixed


 * 1300 to 1400 °C Convert template
 * I'm not sure what this means? How do I fix this?
 * Use Template:Convert to give conversion to Fahreheit in brackets


 * Say either "M grass" or "M. grass"
 * fixed


 * Captions shouldn't have "|". Use commas instead
 * fixed


 * I think you should expand TZ
 * fixed


 * In Agriculture and foodways, listing like (n) where n is a number should not be used mid-text.
 * fixed


 * Uganda-Tanzanian War section could do with some expansion if possible. Not sure how the last line is relevant to the section.
 * moved war section to history, deleted last line


 * One more issue I noticed, per WP:IMGSIZE one should not generally set custom sizes for images or videos, just leave them at "thumb". Sainsf  (t · c)  18:46, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

A nice, comprehensive article on the whole but needs some work before promotion. Cheers, Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 18:59, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, you have not responded since nearly a week of this review. I will have to fail this due to inactivity if you don't respond soon. I will wait another 3 days. Cheers, Sainsf  (knock knock · am I there?) 07:01, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm so sorry - I had gotten a notification that somebody was going to work on the GA review, but I had no idea that it had been completed. I'll work on these edits in the next few days. Thanks so much. Ninafundisha (talk) 11:57, 29 April 2020 (UTC)

Hi, I see you've made some edits to the article but please explain them under the points listed here so that we can go ahead with the review smoothly. Sainsf ·  (How ya doin'?)  16:13, 6 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Okay, will do. Still working on edits. Ninafundisha (talk) 16:55, 6 May 2020 (UTC)

All done? Please update asap. Sainsf ·  (How ya doin'?)  16:18, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

Failing due to inactivity, the nominator has not edited in 2 weeks. Sainsf (t · c)  13:50, 1 June 2020 (UTC)