Talk:Health in Mali

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kateraz. Peer reviewers: Jmarrs94, Patience456, Vnguyen518, Annkat22.

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Wikipage Contribution
Hello! Health in Mali is such a serious, huge issue because the situation at Mali is by far one of the poorest in the world. I think there needs to be a heavier focus on Mali, so I may revise and add information to this Wikipage for those who may be interested in Mali's current or past health situation. Please let me know of any suggestions you may have in revising this! I plan on focusing most on the health of women and children of Mali. Kateraz (talk) 00:14, 11 September 2015 (UTC)
 * Check out the additions for Polio and a reference.--DThomsen8 (talk) 13:47, 11 September 2015 (UTC)

@Dthomsen8: Thank you so much! This article was very helpful in looking at the current health of Mali. I will research further and try to incorporate Polio in my revised version of this article! Kateraz (talk) 22:25, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

Proposed Changes (and future plans)
There are only two sections of broad information listed in this article so far: "Health infrastructure" and "Health status". These two topics seem solid on the information they are supposed to provide, but currently there is too little information regarding these. So, I plan to include some subtopics underneath these two primary topics. Under "Health infrastructure", I plan to add Mali's conditions of health care and medical centers in the recent state (the statistics mentioned currently are mostly from pre-21st century). I also plan to bring to attention the destitute conditions in Mali regarding sanitation, poverty, and food, as I believe that all three can be related to health in some way. Regarding "Health Status", I plan to include an extensive outlook on women's health and children's health, while providing a more broad general health. The current article focuses too much on HIV and AIDS, which is surprisingly not too much of a concern in Mali. I plan to focus on malaria (a much more prevalent disease), health of women in both their general lifestyle and in childbirth, and children's health. Kateraz (talk) 19:35, 9 October 2015 (UTC)

Review
You have done great work on this article! To be more comprehensive, you could include more information about parasites. You could also try to ensure that all of your sources are current. You were quite neutral. Additionally, you could include a picture of a clinic in Mali. Good job! Patience456 (talk) 01:13, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

I really enjoyed reading through the new additions that you have made to the article. I think it has become more comprehensive and relevant to current times. The sections on Life Expediencies and Prevalent Diseases are a little difficult to follow and could use some clarification and formatting changes. One possibility could be to use tables to make the information easier to read. There are some minor grammatical errors throughout, however, I think that this could be easily fixed with continued proofreading and editing. I think it could also be beneficial to have a discussion on the actions taken by the government in response to the health issues. I would also suggest adding more resources to the Children's Health section. Overall, the article was well sourced and fairly comprehensive. Great job so far! Jmarrs94 (talk) 03:55, 4 November 2015 (UTC)

Great job on your topic coverage and overall structure! I think that your article would primarily benefit from making sub-topics primarily concerned with numerical data a lot more readable, increasing the number of illustrations, and expanding each individual subsection so as to be more in-depth and not have one-line descriptions on important topics.Vnguyen518 (talk) 03:37, 5 November 2015 (UTC)

Another Review
Good job with this article! It has definitely been improved through your work. However, I think that this article would benefit a lot from more information about health more broadly. Similarly, I think that if you fix up some of the grammar and add more citations throughout your writing, this will be an excellent article. Keep up the good work! Annkat22 (talk) 14:02, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

A few comments
This is a nice contribution on an important topic. I have a few suggestions:

- review the article for grammar. The introduction contains a few obvious grammar errors, and the article could be improved by paying a little more attention to grammar throughout.

- the second half of the Children's health section contains no citations. Particularly given the use of statistics, that section could be improved by the addition of a few citations.

- the health policy systems section could be expanded. For example, how is the healthcare system in Mali organized? The section only provides a general comment on user fees, rather than information specific to the Malian healthcare system.

Please let me know if you have any questions or would like any help. GavinCross (talk) 19:25, 19 November 2015 (UTC)