Talk:Heartbreak Hotel/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tb hotch Ta lk C. 03:52, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Due the new stuff at GAN, i create the page, I'll review it on this days. Tb hotch Ta lk C. 03:52, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

1 dead link 3 dab links
 * General
 * Infobox
 * All images would have WP:ALT text.
 * Genre: Rock and roll, Blues -> Genre: Rock and roll, blues


 * Lead
 * WP:LEAD does not summarize the article.
 * in Nashville, -> Nashville, Michigan? Nashville, California?
 * first single for RCA Records and -> first single for RCA Records, and
 * music could no be wikilinked.
 * B-side -> wikilink
 * January 27, 1956 -> dates are usually not wikilinked. I've never seen a FA, FL or GA with dates wikilinked, exceptin important dates

[1][2], -> sources are not needed at the lead, the information is in the article.
 * becoming the first #1 pop record by Presley -> several issues:


 * 1) becoming is a connector; a previous It topped the Billboard Hot 100 on x date, becoming... would be proper
 * 2) # 1 -> per WP:numbers -> number one
 * 3) pop record -> according to the article it is a rock and roll/ blues song, not pop.
 * History
 * History -> Background
 * street"[4], -> street",[4]
 * Inspired by the suicide of a young man who left a note with the line, "I walk a lonely street"[4], songwriters Tommy Durden, then a steel-guitarist in Smiling Jack Herring and his Swing Billies,[5] and Mae Boren Axton, a teacher in Jacksonville, Florida, wrote "Heartbreak Hotel" -> This line needs a copy-edit. "a" used to do "b and "c" was a "d"
 * 1955.[6][7]Axton -> 1955.[6][7] Axton
 * Axton was the mother of Hoyt Axton, and also a publicist for Hank Snow whose manager, Colonel Tom Parker, would later also manage Presley. ->
 * December 9, 1955[11][12] -> December 9, 1955,[11][12]
 * and declared it his "first hit" -> source does not state it


 * Recording
 * January 10, 1956 -> January 10, 1956,
 * in Nashville[13], -> in Nashville,[13]
 * Commission .[14] -> Commission.[14]
 * The article needs about its composition (Tempo, vocal range, etc), if is possible to find it.


 * Release
 * Billboard described -> Billboard described
 * he performed Shake, Rattle and Roll mixed with Flip, Flop and Fly, and I Got A Woman he performed "Shake, Rattle and Roll" mixed with "Flip, Flop and Fly", and "I Got A Woman"
 * the song[24], -> the song,[24]
 * the role of producer, -> disambiguation needed
 * When Presley recorded "Hound Dog" a few months later, he had completely taken over the role of producer, using what he learned at Sun Records (although Steve Sholes was still credited) and decided not to use echo. ->


 * Chart performance
 * Pop chart at #68 and the Country and Western chart at number #9. -> Pop chart (which country?) at number 68, and the Country and Western chart at number number nine.
 * two months it had reached #1 on both charts; for eight weeks and seventeen weeks respectively -> #1 -> number one -> and unsourced too
 * It also peaked at #5 -> five
 * resulting in Presley's first Gold record[25] -> resulting in Presley's first Gold record,[25]
 * Why there's no information about his 2.00x Multi Platinum certification?
 * his follow-up single, I Want You, I Need You, I Love You, the same month -> his follow-up single, "I Want You, I Need You, I Love You", the same month
 * In the UK, the single reached #2 on the Pop singles charts -> the UK charts are not pop-only charts.


 * Legacy
 * "Heartbreak Hotel" became an instantly recognizable part of Presley's live set. -> POV?
 * and it was re-released in 1971 for the UK market where it charted at #10 -> This source is more reliable, but did not shown the "fact"
 * Hall of Fame[28], -> Hall of Fame,[28]
 * [30], -> ,[30]
 * Uncut Magazine -> Uncut
 * as a 3-track CD single[32] that -> Different topic, comma -> as a 3-track CD single,[32] that
 * the Billboard Hot Singles Sales Chart.[7], -> the Billboard Hot Singles Sales Chart.[7] ,
 * the Billboard Hot Singles Sales Chart.[7],  -> per the bold
 * pesmama[33]. The -> pesmama.[33] The
 * president Bill Clinton -> wikilink
 * ''In 1997, the Elvis Presley Enterprises purchased a Wilson World Hotel branch and after several renovations, in 1998 opened it and named the hotel after the song, located across the street from Presley's home, Graceland, in Memphis, Tennessee.[7][35]

A movie with the same title, based on a mythical incident involving the kidnapping of Presley, was released theatrically in 1988. It starred David Keith as Elvis Presley, and was directed by Chris Columbus.[36] That same year, the song was mentioned in Patty Loveless's "Blue Side of Town".[37]'' -> not enough information for deserve their own paragraphs.
 * had a no. 1 -> WP:NUMBERS
 * only #1 -> per above
 * The Cadets -> who?
 * The Rock -> maybe Dwayne "The Rock" Johnson?
 * The Rock was famous for singing his own version of the song, renamed "Smackdown Hotel", during his wrestling career.[43] -> source does not state it.


 * Non-free media
 * File:Heartbreak.JPG - ✅
 * File:Heartbreakhotel.ogg - ✅
 * File:Elvisnashville.jpg -
 * File:Elvisstageshow.jpg -
 * File:Elvisfirstgoldrecord.jpg -
 * And the reason is: According to our beauty fair use rule 3a: Minimal usage. Multiple items of non-free content are not used if one item can convey equivalent significant information. -> Obviously those are unique in history and free images would not exist. But having 5 non-free media in an article is excessive. If you choice to keep on of them, it must be reduced, at least 200px and at most 300px.


 * References
 * Do not use " " in the cite web template. It does it by default
 * Ref 1, 10, 13, 18, 19, 21, 25 -> Those are published by Elvis Presley Enterprise so -> |work=Elvis Presley Official Website or Elvis.com or Elvis News |publisher=Elvis Presley Enterprise
 * Ref 3, 9, 12, 15, 20, 22, 23 need to go in this format. You are giving an author and the pages, but where is the book?
 * Ref 8 and 36 are not reliable sources
 * Ref 25 needs to be changed by the RIAA link
 * Ref 27 needs to be changed to the reference of Chart Stats or the Official Company link, is more reliable.
 * 24, 26, 28, 29, 30, 33, 34 are according to them external links, but there's no source
 * Ref 31 -> |work= BBC News |publisher=BBC
 * Ref 35, 37 -> |work=Yahoo! Music |publisher=Yahoo!
 * Ref 41 -> |work=Billboard |publisher=Nielsen Business Company or Nielsen Company
 * Gray, Michael "Thomas Durden obituary", The Guardian, 1999-10-28, Retrieved on April 19, 2007. -> Not a reference itself, maybe an external link
 * Sucession chart does not go on the section, per a recent consensus the table should be sustituted by a "see also" Billboard Top 100 number one single, etc.
 * The template Elvis Presley is not for this article.


 * Final comment
 * Good article, but not a good article yet. I have to quick fail it. It needs a general copy-edit, and fix the sources and unsourced facts. You are overusing the ref 7, is reliable=yes, the problem is that the information should exist in Billboard archives (for the chart stuff), You should use only one image (single cover) and at most two of them. Tb hotch Ta lk C. 02:33, 5 October 2010 (UTC)

If you feel this is in error, you may request a Good article reassessment or re-nominate it. Tb hotch Ta lk C. 02:36, 5 October 2010 (UTC)