Talk:Heinrich Sigismund von der Heyde/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:57, 7 July 2018 (UTC)

I will review, comments to follow over next few days. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 22:57, 7 July 2018 (UTC)

OK, there are quite a few issues here but most will be sorted with a copyedit. Infobox
 * The place of birth in the "Born" field has spacing issues ✅
 * Seven Years War is mentioned in the infobox but isn't explicitly stated in the body of the article ✅
 * Awards: is being listed on the statue considered to be an award?  It's a commemoration....? and yes I'd consider it an award

Lead
 * Kolberg is linked on the second mention, not the first✅
 * His exact date of birth not stated (it is in the infobox) ✅
 * "the Order Pour le Merite": shouldn't it be the "the Order of Pour le Merite"? Not really.  People want to add Order, but it really is just Pour le Merite....

Family
 * "...born in 1703 Schacksdorf in...": there's a missing word in there. Also I suggest putting some context for what Schacksdorf is, since you later refer to "heir to Schacksdorf" ✅

Military career
 * The 2nd sentence of the 1st paragraph mentions a series of ranks; these should all be lower case. I suggest that these be presented more in sentence style for better flow. Also, chief of staff of what? ✅
 * "In 1741 he received his first Grenadier company": received? I assume you mean given command of...✅
 * No context for "There must then have been inconsistencies between him and General Leopold von Anhalt-Dessau." I appreciate sources may not be clear on the "inconsistencies" but who is Anhalt-Dessau to Heyde? ✅
 * link Königsberg, Kolberg ✅

Sieges of Kolberg
 * "became a deputy commander, and on 3 October 1758," deputy commander of what? The town or a unit? Also, the way the sentence is structured suggests a relationship between the promotion and the attack on 3 October. ✅
 * "He tried": unusual language, suggest "his forces made" ✅
 * King who? Suggest linking as well ✅
 * "the second siege took place". I suggest for clarity and context amending the first sentence of the first paragraph to "commencing his first siege..." ✅
 * "Sweden and Russia included the fortress": included? ✅
 * "the Austrians, at which the Austrians"; repeated usage of Austrians and furthermore, I thought the besieging forces were Swedish/Russian. Where did the Austrians come from? clarified
 * "image of General Werner, one with the image of the Colonel Heyde"; no need for the ranks in this sentence ✅
 * "Friedrich wrote: I am not infallible; in this man I have been greatly wrong.": who is Friedrich and why was he greatly wrong about Heyde?
 * "promoted o the rank of ": typo in there  ✅

Final siege and captivity
 * "3 3 September 1761": repeated numbers  ✅
 * "the Friedrich Eugen of Württemberg"; this is a name not a title so "the" is not appropriate ✅
 * "but he too struggled": who else was struggling with supplies? ✅
 * "preparing storms": storms? ✅
 * "The troops under General Dubislav von Platen.." No antecedence for "The troops", some context is required ✅
 * I don't think it necessary to use italics for emphasis ✅
 * "the Duke's troops"; who is the Duke (unless it is Friedrich, but then you will need to clarify that they are the same)Friedrich is the King. I think it's clearer now.
 * "ended the Russia's"; "the"? ✅
 * "Heyde was reinstated.."; in this sentence, Heyde's name is stated twice. The second usage could be "he". Also reinstated to what? ✅
 * "in Königsberg in the fortress of Friedrichsburg"; in the first paragraph of the military career section it is stated the fortress is near Konigsberg not in it
 * "Marienkirche of Kolberg"; link this or provide a translation of Marienkirche ✅
 * "Kolberg, broke"; replace the comma with and, the two are linked ✅

Sources
 * Need to ensure formatting of all sources are consistent✅
 * Note 4: place of publication? Also, the year of publication is stated twice ✅
 * Note 5: Shouldn't the obit link be part of the title or chapter? ✅
 * issue with the presentation of the link for note 6, and what does np mean? no publisher) written out

That's it for now, I may have more comments once the above issues have been addressed. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:55, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
 * thank you ! auntieruth (talk) 16:29, 12 July 2018 (UTC)
 * Hi, just resuming this review. Reviewing your changes, they look good. I like the use of the box for his promotions. I have made a few edits, check you are OK with these. I realised I didn't check the images first time so have done this; they look to have appropriate tags. One final issue: the sentence "Heyde, deployed his approximately troops..." is missing the number of troops. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:44, 21 July 2018 (UTC)
 * :*thank you ! added 700....he didn't have a large force!  thanks much, your tweaks look good.  Cheers, auntieruth (talk) 15:31, 23 July 2018 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

I'm satisfied that this meets GA standard. Passing now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:43, 25 July 2018 (UTC)