Talk:Helena Springs/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:16, 30 July 2022 (UTC)

This has been in the queue for over two months, making a review well due! --K. Peake 09:16, 30 July 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Can't any other parameters like children or spouse be added to the infobox; try genres too if you can source any in the body?
 * Amended. I made "Infobox musical artist" a module as it doesn't support the "children" parameter. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:35, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * "(born c. 1961) is an" → "(born c. 1961), is an"
 * "She was previously a" → "The singer was first a"
 * Wikilink Bob Dylan
 * "and appeared on his albums" → "Springs appeared on his albums" starting a new sentence at this point, to avoid a run-on like current
 * Pipe compilation to Compilation album
 * "she released the albums" → "Springs released the albums"
 * "for other artists including" → "for other artists, including"
 * "Pet Shop Boys and Elton John." → "Pet Shop Boys, and Elton John."
 * Amended the article per the eight points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:31, 31 July 2022 (UTC)


 * Add sentences mentioning Springs' work in cabaret and her relationships plus children to the lead
 * Added. Let me know what you think. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:35, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

Career

 * "aged 5, at" → "aged five, at"
 * "When she was 17," → "When Springs was 17,"
 * "She appears on" → "She appeared on"
 * Pipe compilation to Compilation album
 * "with Dylan was her" → "with him was her"
 * "than any of Dylan's other" → "than any of his other"
 * I would suggest changing claimed to said per WP:CLAIM
 * Amended per the seven points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:13, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Should you change "are published" to using were instead for the correct tense?
 * Yes, done. The source is from 2008, so "were" seems a better option. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:13, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * "Both of those, and another collaboration, "Stop Now"," → "Both the tracks and fellow collaboration "Stop Now""
 * Lowercase the Searchers per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * Amended per the two points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:13, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Why is "performed just once" at the end of the sentence when you have already mentioned this fact?
 * Incompetence. Now removed. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:13, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * "this was on" → "the meeting was on"
 * "for a time afterwards." → "for some time afterwards."
 * "She joined Bette Midler" → "The singer joined Bette Midler"
 * "She contributed vocals" → "Springs contributed backing vocals"
 * Add speech marks around "West End Girls"
 * ""A New Life" with" → ""A New Life", with"
 * "b-side of" → "B-side of" with the pipe
 * "she toured with" → "the singer toured with"
 * ""Paper Money" and" → ""Paper Money", and"
 * Merge the fifth para with the fourth one
 * Pipe Birmingham Evening Mail to Birmingham Mail
 * Amended per the eleven points above. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:13, 1 August 2022 (UTC)


 * Remove or replace the Evening Standard per WP:RSP
 * Please see reply under the References section. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 08:14, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "claimed that the relationship" → "writes the relationship"
 * Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 13:32, 31 July 2022 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 10:31, 30 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks . I've replied above. (I also added one further newspaper review to the article.) Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 09:35, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Same to you for going over all of these issues and I am fine with the Evening Standard usage, however can you use infobox person instead like articles such as Kanye West do? --K. Peake 21:23, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
 * I've amended the infobox. I also added a couple of external links. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 11:04, 2 August 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, this looks great and I made one brief fix to the infobox! --K. Peake 11:10, 2 August 2022 (UTC)