Talk:Helene Lecher/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mujinga (talk · contribs) 17:34, 21 April 2023 (UTC)

Spotchecks

 * 4a ok
 * 4b needs to be marked p2
 * done SusunW (talk) 19:13, 21 April 2023 (UTC)


 * 4c ok, needs to be marked p2
 * I'm confused. Is it okay or needs p. 2? I think what mean is that it is verified on page 2? I checked and changed the p #. SusunW (talk) 19:13, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 09:31, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * 4d seems to be all the kids, not just the girls - plus the 3Rs, needs to be marked p2
 * changed to "they" and p 2 SusunW (talk) 19:13, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 09:31, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * 30a ok
 * 30b, 31 ok
 * 35 ok
 * 43 ok

Pix
The one pic is relevant and appropriately licensed

Prose
Generally excellent as normal, here's some queries:
 * "From a young age, Rosthorn was influenced by a caretaker on her mother's estate about the importance of diet in assisting recovery from illness" - influenced .. about ... reads strange to me, can you rephrase?
 * Hmmm, concerning? on?, but I've just used on, so maybe over? If that works, then done. SusunW (talk) 18:25, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 09:32, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "She asked whether man's intent was to force women to build international networks and decide to stop populating the world" - this reads funny, I'm not sure who is intending to stop populating, man or woman. can your rephrase?
 * Men would force women to do it. Maybe taking out decide helps? SusunW (talk) 18:25, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 09:32, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "She reported that as part of their care, she tried to educate children about the importance of internationalism" - link Internationalism (politics)?
 * done SusunW (talk) 18:25, 21 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "head of a 6,000-bed hospital for the Grinzing District barracks facility," - do you need barracks and facility?
 * done SusunW (talk) 18:25, 21 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "Versöhnungsbundes (Union of Reconciliation) who urged the Chancellor of Austria in 1928, " - don't think the comma is needed?
 * deleted SusunW (talk) 18:25, 21 April 2023 (UTC)


 * oh that's sad to be killed by a hit-and-run cyclist
 * I know. I asked Kusma to check it for me because it seemed bizarre that someone on a bicycle could kill someone, but indeed, that's what it means. And to not stop. It's not like a car where you might have blind spots and not seen, this would have required physical contact. So tragic. SusunW (talk) 18:25, 21 April 2023 (UTC)


 * " She was remembered for her care of the wounded during the war and after the conflict for her dedication to youth and the poor" - remembered by who? perhaps "after the conflict" should be at end of sentence
 * added "in the obituary which appeared in Die Österreicherin and deleted after the conflict. SusunW (talk) 19:42, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 09:33, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * lead :
 * where is "she studied at the German School" in the text? Here: " From 1895, Rosthorn was involved in theater productions with the Deutscher Schulverein (German School Association) of Prague. "?
 * Yes, how could non-students (except possibly parents or chaperones) be part of a school association? Thus, to my mind, she was a student. But, I changed it to read "she was involved with the German School Association" SusunW (talk) 19:42, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * yes i agree it's a reasonable assumption but by the timing she was already quite old (30), and what got me was I was looking for THE German School of Prague to see if we could wikilink it. Much better now thanks! Mujinga (talk) 09:35, 22 April 2023 (UTC)


 * " she converted two of the former hospital barracks in the Grinzing District of Vienna into a facility for children which provided housing for orphans, a children's play garden, a clinic, and a distribution center for food and clothing" - seems a bit different to what is in article
 * Article body says Accommodations, a children's play garden, and a convalescent and health care area with specialized equipment were established and Food and clothing were donated by the Austrian and Danish Red Cross organizations and by international hospital relief networks. My distinct impression, because only a few of the children who were orphans or convalescing stayed in the facility so why would they need to collect clothes, is that the bulk of the goods collected were distributed. Korotin describes it as a day home, and Janik & Veigl say that she "organized the distribution of donations for the children". p 34 Perhaps I need to make that clearer. I added after "relief networks", "and distributed to children in need". If that works, then I am fairly sure that the body text is similar to the lede. SusunW (talk) 19:42, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ Mujinga (talk) 09:36, 22 April 2023 (UTC)

Overall

 * Hi SusunW, I'll take this on to review Mujinga (talk) 17:34, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Looking forward to working with you. SusunW (talk) 17:48, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Everything seems quite close to GA standard, putting on hold Mujinga (talk) 18:20, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * After wandering over and fixing the brewers, thanks for alerting me, I think I have answered everything, but if not, please just let me know. I do appreciate your always-helpful comments and efforts to improve articles. SusunW (talk) 19:44, 21 April 2023 (UTC)
 * yes looking over the edits now and everything is ✅, congrats on another GA! Mujinga (talk) 09:37, 22 April 2023 (UTC)