Talk:Hell Yeah! Wrath of the Dead Rabbit/GA1

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Reviewer: Status (talk · contribs) 16:23, 17 January 2013 (UTC)


 * I must say, this is quite an interesting game concept.
 * Lead is a bit short. How about adding some information about what you actually do in the game, and how critics reacted to it?
 * "Gaming websites were sharply divided over the game with." → With what?
 * "the relatively high score" → "a relatively high score"
 * "Critics praised the game's visuals." → This seems a bit too, I'm not sure how to describe it, it doesn't really go anywhere or add anything, just a statement.
 * "Lawrence Sonntag of Inside Gaming Daily comments that..." → "Lawrence Sonntag of Inside Gaming Daily wrote that..."
 * "Tom Bramwell of Eurogamer says that the game is..." → "Tom Bramwell of Eurogamer wrote that the game is..."

Responses in order:


 * Agreed. But normal is overrated.
 * Expanded the lead.
 * Removed the word 'with'. Originally that sentence and the next one were one giant run on, but I split them.
 * I disagree, but I changed it.
 * I put it in to contextualize the next sentence and help balance out the tone of the review section. Should I combine it with the next sentence?
 * Changed.
 * Changed.

 S ven M anguard  Wha?  00:54, 18 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "...giving it very low ones" → really not feeling this, it doesn't sound very professionally written at all.
 * "The game was roundly praised for its looks..." → What exactly does "roundly" mean? And looks, I assume that means graphics?


 * Did another round of tweaks. How does it work now?  S ven M anguard   Wha?  06:07, 18 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I think we're good now! Passing the article! Great work. P.S. I've just went and combined the sentences to create: "Critics praised the game's visuals, with Lawrence Sonntag of Inside Gaming Daily writing that..."  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 13:47, 18 January 2013 (UTC)