Talk:Henri-Thomas Lokondo/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 00:50, 22 August 2018 (UTC)

The primary thing here is lead expansion. More should be mentioned upfront about his dissent and other parliamentary activities. "He earned a degree in political science with a focus in international relations from the Université libre de Bruxelles." Poli-sci can be wikilinked " Lokondo then worked in the Congolese government's intelligence services in Uvira." Is there an article for the Congolese MI6 equivalent? "Conference Nationale Souveraine" A backdrop for this would be nice Kinshasa should be wikilinked once as well "Lokondo went into exile in Belgium though several months later he returned under Laurent-Désiré Kabila's regime..." Comma after Belgium "On 8 November he vacated his seat in the Assembly." 2004 I assume? All the rest seems fine. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 00:50, 22 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Added "In the 2000s he formed his own party, the Union Congolaise pour la Liberté. Though officially allied with President Joseph Kabila in Parliament through a coalition, Lokondo has frequently contradicted the bloc's positions in favor of his own party's stances."
 * Done
 * Wikilinked to National Intelligence Agency (Democratic Republic of the Congo)
 * "the Conference Nationale Souveraine—a national convention that discussed democratisation and political reform"
 * Done
 * Done
 * Yes, I figured this didn't need any clarification because of the preceding sentence.
 * I've responded to all comments, and I've added a little contextual information to the article. -Indy beetle (talk) 03:30, 23 August 2018 (UTC)
 * I've reset the review parameter to request a new reviewer, as it appears this review has been abandoned. -Indy beetle (talk) 18:39, 12 September 2018 (UTC)