Talk:Henrik Larsson/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 19:22, 23 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * This is made up of three very short paragraphs, and one of average length, giving it a strange balance. It reads like a list of the clubs he played for, where really it should provide more of a snapshot of the article and the person himself. For example, it doesn't say anywhere in the lead what position he played!
 * As the lead shouldn't include anything that isn't somewhere else in the article, it doesn't require references: those should be provided when the fact is mentioned in the main body of the article.


 * Early life
 * The language is simplistic, it reads like a string of individual sentences strung together that have little or no connection to each other: try creating more of a flow, showing some development.
 * The start of "Early career", set during his childhood should probably go in this section too.


 * Early career
 * As above, the first part of this should go into Early life.
 * The rest of this section gives three sentences to his professional career at three clubs, spanning nine years and 231 matches: this definitely needs heavy expansion and mention needs to be made that he played professionally at Högaborg.


 * Celtic
 * Poorly referenced throughout this section; for example, the first paragraph has just two references, the second paragraph none at all, and the third paragraph just two. The rest of the section appears to continue in a similar fashion.
 * You heavily overlink in this section: at a glance I can see Juventus linked twice, and Celtic Park at least three times: have a read through WP:MOSLINK, particularly WP:REPEATLINK.
 * Maintain encyclopedic language throughout the article: "..Celtic parachuted into the.." is an example of straying from this into more journalistic language.
 * Try to avoid constructions such as "..opener in a 1–1 1st leg.." : the repeated numbers make it hard to follow the sentence; replace 1st with first. In general, except for scorelines, try to write out single digit numbers (personally I tend to do so for most under 20.)
 * "2003 also saw Larsson voted.." – MOS:NUM advises not to start sentences with numbers, specifically not those in numerical form: Try something like "In 2003 Larsson was voted.."


 * General
 * The rest of the article continues to have the same issues with both prose and referencing, and given the amount of work that would need to be done, I don't think this article would benefit from being place on hold. My advice would be to go through the article as it is at the moment, and firstly add references for everything in it. Then the prose can be improved and made to flow more. Short, particularly single sentence paragraphs need to be merged together. Parts of the article need a lot more information included, specifically the early parts of his career and his management career. The list of international goals doesn't add that much to the article, and is completely unreferenced: in my opinion, it should be removed from the article. His career statistics are similarly unreferenced, although I don't think they should be removed! The references themselves need to be made consistent, as some currently don't include details that others do provide: publisher and location details for news sources for example.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

 Harrias  talk 19:22, 23 October 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
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