Talk:Henry I of England/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 04:21, 7 March 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 04:21, 7 March 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
I didn't make it very far in this one before needing to take a break, but here's a question before I forget it. (Here in the US, nobody tells us much that happened before the year 1776, so you may need to be patient with my questions throughout this review.)


 * "William Rufus's plans for the invasion of England began to falter" -- I may be losing the thread here, but hasn't WR already crossed the channel and been crowned king? (i.e., should this be Robert who's planning to invade England?) -- Khazar2 (talk) 20:57, 7 March 2013 (UTC)
 * This has now been changed to Robert by another user. -- Khazar2 (talk) 09:33, 8 March 2013 (UTC)

More:
 * "strengthened it additional central governmental institutions" -- is there a word missing in this phrase?
 * "after around 1110" -- this can probably be written as "around 1110" or "after 1110", but I'm not sure both modifiers are needed.
 * I've made various small copyedits as I went for both proofreading and style. Please feel free to revert any you disagree with, and double-check me to make sure I haven't accidentally done more harm than good.

The article appears excellent on this first pass: well written and well sourced, and comparing it to other websites about Henry I, appears to cover all essential points and then some. (Indeed, this is probably ready for a Featured Article candidacy after a little more proofreading.) Thanks for this terrific piece of work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 09:33, 8 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! Changes made, and the image tags should be correct now. Hchc2009 (talk) 12:35, 10 March 2013 (UTC)