Talk:Henry M. Mathews/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 19:03, 14 September 2019 (UTC)

Review
Will review. Stay tuned! MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 19:03, 14 September 2019 (UTC)

Infobox
done Newtack101 (talk) 17:22, 16 September 2019 (UTC) done Newtack101 (talk) 13:43, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
 * - he's mentioned here but nowhere in the body paragraphs. Per WP:INFOBOXCITE, everything in the infobox should be cited and mentioned elsewhere in the sections.
 * - Needs a source and mention elsewhere in the body that he was the 5th Governor of WV.


 * - The only mentions of "March 4" are here. Needs a source and mention in the sections.

done Newtack101 (talk) 13:43, 16 September 2019 (UTC)


 * - Ditto

done Newtack101 (talk) 17:22, 16 September 2019 (UTC)


 * - Ditto, the "Later life" section only mentions his year. Does the source include the day and month?

done Newtack101 (talk) 13:43, 16 September 2019 (UTC)


 * - A bit picky here, but the "Early life" section gives no mention to "Shore". Please make sure the cited sources include this name, and then incorporate it to that section.

done Newtack101 (talk) 13:43, 16 September 2019 (UTC)


 * - The "Military service" section says he served as a private rank. Which of the two is it?

good point, i guess i assumed he passed through the rank of captain on the way to major, but that's not necessarily true. I've removed captain as I can't find it in a source. will address the rest of your points in coming days. Thanks for the review! Newtack101 (talk) 13:43, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

Lead paragraph

 * The info here is cited elsewhere in the body and does not need any sources, per WP:LEADCITE. However, I'm concerned with the size and level of detail of the lead. Per MOS:LEADLENGTH, we generally do not write articles with more than four paragraphs. Given the size of this article (in prose), the lead is too long. Leads should also give a general summary of the subject, and I think that trimming these paragraphs will help achieve that. Given the size of the prose in the sections, I think 2 or maybe 3 (but stretching it) paragraphs are enough. I understand this is a guideline, but the guideline is there for a reason; the intro is just too long. A lot of trimming is needed here.

lead has been trimmed. let me know what you think. Newtack101 (talk) 16:49, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

Early life

 * – I would link the civil war, for inquisitive readers.

done Newtack101 (talk) 14:29, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

done Newtack101 (talk) 14:29, 16 September 2019 (UTC) done Newtack101 (talk) 14:29, 16 September 2019 (UTC) done Newtack101 (talk) 14:29, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
 * – Same here for the 1860 United States presidential election
 * – would lose → lost; simpler
 * – I think it would be appropriate to link Secession in the United States somewhere

Military service
done Newtack101 (talk) 13:48, 16 September 2019 (UTC) good catch, thanks. done Newtack101 (talk) 13:48, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
 * – WP:OVERLINK, please remove link for his father
 * – Is it Fort Donelson?

Political rise

 * – I would add a source for these claims here, as the following source is too far away.

done Newtack101 (talk) 15:26, 16 September 2019 (UTC)

Great Railroad Strikes
done Newtack101 (talk) 13:45, 16 September 2019 (UTC) done Newtack101 (talk) 13:45, 16 September 2019 (UTC) done Newtack101 (talk) 13:45, 16 September 2019 (UTC) done Newtack101 (talk) 13:45, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
 * - Comma after West Virginia,
 * - Hayes by itself is fine
 * - is it a direct quote? Do "insurrection" instead.
 * - Hayes is fine here too.

Views on race and slavery
done Newtack101 (talk) 13:46, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
 * - you should use the – dash instead

Later life
done Newtack101 (talk) 13:46, 16 September 2019 (UTC)
 * – please remove link on Lee per WP:OVERLINK