Talk:Hensley & Co.

Ambiguous
"At the time of Jim Hensley's death in 2000, he held most of the controlling stock"

'Did you mean to write 'At the time of his death in 2000, Jim Hensley held most of the controlling stock', or does the "he" reference another person? [16:36, May 22, 2008 216.229.89.63]


 * Resolved. Wasted Time R (talk) 00:29, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

Organization
I don't want to formally open the GAN on this article at this point, but I think the second "history" section looks somewhat amorphous. Have you considered, perhaps, separating the company's political and community activities into dedicated sections? It might give the article as a whole a better sense of structure. Gatoclass (talk) 15:39, 30 April 2011 (UTC)


 * That's a possibility, but for any company in the heavily regulated and taxed alcohol industry, political activities are part and parcel of what they do. And political aspects became even more a part of the story of Hensley once the daughter and future chair married someone who became a prominent U.S. politician.  Charitable and community activities are also prominent in the alcohol industry, as they attempt to combat negative publicity from some corners of the public.  So on balance, I think an integrated chronological approach is better here.  Wasted Time R (talk) 21:29, 30 April 2011 (UTC)


 * I've taken the liberty of splitting the second section into smaller subsections. Having read it again, I can't escape the feeling of being jerked around uncomfortably from one topic to another. The end result is to discourage me from reading it at all. I don't see that chronology is a major issue for this section - certainly, I didn't get a sense of chronological sequence from the original arrangement. IMO it's more useful to the reader in this instance to have the info logically rather than chronologically arranged. I'm not going to revert back if you decide that you prefer the original arrangement, but I do hope you will at least consider the alternative arrangement before doing so. Gatoclass (talk) 08:37, 1 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Okay, we'll go this way. I see your point and the article is short enough that readers can 'get' the chronology even with a logical organization.  But it makes sense to pull out the political activities from the pre-2000 history as well.  This allows the article to just have one-level sectioning, which is for the better here.  Wasted Time R (talk) 12:16, 1 May 2011 (UTC)


 * That looks fine to me now, although perhaps the "Business history" section could still be divided up into pre- and post-2000, but that's a minor quibble.


 * If nobody else reviews this article over the next week or so, I will come back and open the GA review. Normally I would have done it right away, but I'm snowed under with other wikiwork at the moment that really can't wait any longer. Hopefully in a few days I will have some more free time. Gatoclass (talk) 16:24, 1 May 2011 (UTC)

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