Talk:Hensley & Co./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gatoclass (talk) 16:36, 1 May 2011 (UTC)

Actually, I changed my mind, I think I will review this - it shouldn't take too long. Gatoclass (talk) 16:36, 1 May 2011 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * A few issues here:
 * "Hensley accepted an offer later that year". Later what year?
 * "While it initially handled many brands of beer, Hensley accepted an offer later that year[1] to become Anheuser-Busch's exclusive distributor for Maricopa County". Does this mean Hensley only sold Anheuser-Busch brands, or that Hensley was the only distributor to sell A-B's product in Mariposa?
 * "from 2001 to 2006, the company and its employees would contribute an additional $24,000 to such campaigns". Does "such campaigns" mean McCain's campaigns, or political campaigns in general? (If the former, I would suggest simply dropping the "to such campaigns" phrase).
 * "with company executives contributing heavily to it[17] and company spokesperson Douglas Yonko the association's Arizona director". Sentence makes no sense to me, can you clarify it somehow please?
 * "not to impose alcohol content display requirement for beer labels". I think I know what this means, but the sentence doesn't make much sense and seems to be ungrammatical. Why not just something like "not to require alcohol content displays for beer labels"?
 * All issues now resolved. Gatoclass (talk) 02:17, 21 May 2011 (UTC)


 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Seems to have a nice balance between the company's self-interested actions and its community initiatives.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * I guess it could have an image of Cindy McCain, or perhaps a crate of beer or something.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * A well written and informative article which strikes a nice balance between the company's history and its political and community activities. Gatoclass (talk) 02:17, 21 May 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * I guess it could have an image of Cindy McCain, or perhaps a crate of beer or something.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * A well written and informative article which strikes a nice balance between the company's history and its political and community activities. Gatoclass (talk) 02:17, 21 May 2011 (UTC)
 * A well written and informative article which strikes a nice balance between the company's history and its political and community activities. Gatoclass (talk) 02:17, 21 May 2011 (UTC)

Units Lightmouse (talk) 18:45, 9 May 2011 (UTC)
 * It refers to "case" of beer in three places. It would be helpful to the reader to provide volume units.


 * Thanks again for the review. I've made changes to address all these points, including the one Lightmouse added.  Wasted Time R (talk) 12:14, 20 May 2011 (UTC)