Talk:Herb Mitchell (actor)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 04:43, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. I'll begin with a close readthrough of the article in the next few days, noting any initial issues here, and then move on to the criteria checklist. Looking forward to working with you--thanks in advance for your work on this one. -- Khazar2 (talk) 04:43, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

Initial readthrough

 * "He was paid a primary tribute" -- I'm not clear what a "primary tribute" is--how does it differ from a tribute?
 * Took out "primary". --George Ho (talk) 23:36, 6 January 2013 (UTC)
 * The lead could use slight expansion to better cover the article's contents--probably mention the Dean Witter commercials that he's best known for, another major part or two, and a sentence or two about the path of his life.
 * Known for what? I don't think his roles were that big while he was alive. --George Ho (talk) 23:38, 6 January 2013 (UTC)
 * True. That's how the LAT piece identified him, and I misremembered the emphasis they put on it. . It would be helpful, though, to identify one or two key parts in the lead (perhaps the Dean Witter and the Practice role); "appeared in theaters, films, television, and in commercials" is a bit too generic to be helpful for the reader looking for a quick summary. You might also mention that he moved into acting full-time after a start in finance, as this is an aspect his obituaries seem to emphasize. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:45, 6 January 2013 (UTC)
 * I hope the current version's lede is better. --George Ho (talk) 23:52, 6 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Yep, definitely improved. I expanded it still a little more, and removed the tag. Does the new version look acceptable to you? If so, I think we're good to go. -- Khazar2 (talk) 03:39, 7 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Much, much better. Even if it passes GAN, this article may still be edited without affecting the GA status too much. --George Ho (talk) 03:50, 7 January 2013 (UTC)

Prose looks strong, and sourcing is good. I'm concerned with the article's length, though; this is the first time I've run into an article this short for a GA nom (3kb readable text). Let me briefly consult at WT:GAN if this can meet requirements. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:17, 6 January 2013 (UTC)