Talk:Herbert Hart (general)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ed! (talk · contribs) 13:17, 8 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Generally, very short sections are frowned upon. I suggest merging "Early Life" and "Military career" into one.
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "... but his application was declined. " -- Why was this? Because of his age?
 * My source doesn't explicitly state why; he did falsify his age in order to enlist for the Ninth contingent so it was most likely for this reason. I have added the falsification of his age to the article. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "He was also active in the Volunteer Force, being elected as a lieutenant of the Carterton Rifle Volunteers." -- You'll have to explain the meaning of "elected" here, or link to the practice, as it's unfamiliar to a global audience that you can be "voted" an officer.
 * Have expanded and added a ref for this. Let me know if it is not sufficient and requires further clarification. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Repetition: "In 1930, Hart applied for and was appointed to the position of Administrator of Western Samoa, which was then administered ..."
 * Revised. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * " his wife initially moved to Cairo because of the general civil unrest in Palestine at the time ..." is there anything you can link to for this?
 * Revised and linked. I also added few extra bits to this section. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Dup links tool is showing five results: Second Boer War; First World War; Imperial War Graves Commission; New Zealand Rifle Brigade (Earl of Liverpool's Own); Wellington (City of Wellington's Own) and Hawke's Bay Regiment
 * Have fixed the last two which definitely appear in the body of the article twice, but unless I'm being totally blind I think the first three must be getting picked up from the lead or infobox; it is my understanding that this is acceptable. Let me know if I am wrong or overlooking a doubleup in the article body somewhere. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * One image needs permissions: File:BG H Hart.jpg (I assume it's public domain but this needs to be cleared up)
 * I thought a CC-by-3.0 licence would be acceptable as it has been made available with that licence. I have added the PD tag anyway as author of work in which photograph was published died in 1931. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Dab links and external links show no problems. There are no issues with stability or neutrality. All other images appear to be properly licensed.
 * On hold pending responses. Will check back later. — Ed! (talk) 13:39, 8 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Ed!, thanks for taking the time to review this article. Hopefully my responses/amendments are all satisfactory. Zawed (talk) 08:33, 9 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Great work! Passing the article for GA. — Ed! (talk) 12:17, 9 January 2013 (UTC)