Talk:High-performance instrumented airborne platform for environmental research

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The High-performance Instrumented Airborne Platform for Environmental Research (HIAPER) is a modified Gulfstream V aircraft that is owned by the National Science Foundation (NSF) and operated by the Earth Observing Laboratory (EOL) at the National Center for Atmospheric Research (NCAR) in Boulder, Colorado. The aircraft was purchased brand-new from Gulfstream Aerospace in 2002 and then modified by Lockheed Martin in Greenville, South Carolina over a period of two years, for a total cost of approximately $80 million.[1]

The unique flight characteristics of the Gulfstream V, plus the ability to carry 5,600 pounds (2,540 kilograms) of sensors, makes HIAPER a versatile airborne laboratory for scientific discovery. It can reach 51,000 feet (15,500 meters), enabling scientists to collect data from near the Earth’s surface to the tops of storms and to the lower edge of the stratosphere. With a range of about 7,000 miles (11,265 kilometers), it can reach many remote locations, allowing for sampling from the North Pole to the South Pole. Data collected by the aircraft and its instruments are essential for understanding environmental conditions and associated changes, including the distribution of trace gases and air pollutants, the formation of cloud systems, and severe weather observations. Instrumentation on the HIAPER GV has also played an important role in the calibration and validation of satellite instruments.

Each HIAPER GV payload is customized to meet the scientific objectives and research goals of a specific mission. NCAR, in conjunction with university groups and private industry, have developed and maintained a suite of highly-capable airborne instruments known as the HIAPER Airborne Instrumentation Solicitation (HAIS). In addition to the HAIS instrumentation, NCAR offers in-situ, remote sensing, and expendable instruments to be deployed from the aircraft. Typical payloads for scientific missions include a combination of these instruments with other instruments provided and operated by investigators from universities, other government organizations and private companies.

These instruments must comply with mechanical, structural, electrical, and flammability requirements. NCAR works closely with instrument investigators to assist with payload certification and integration, and maintains a Design and Fabrication Services facility that is capable of manufacturing airborne instruments and interface hardware.1 Data collected during HIAPER research flights are publicly available within one year after the conclusion of a research project and can be found in the EOL Field Catalogs.

References HIAPER Gulfstream GV | Earth Observing Laboratory. (n.d.). Retrieved November 1, 2018, from https://www.eol.ucar.edu/observing_facilities/hiaper-gulfstream-gv. Aircraft Instrumentation | Earth Observing Laboratory. (n.d.). Retrieved November 1, 2018, from https://www.eol.ucar.edu/aircraft-instrumentation. EOL Data Policy | Earth Observing Laboratory. (n.d.). Retrieved November 1, 2018, from https://www.eol.ucar.edu/content/eol-data-policy. External links Official website | www.eol.ucar.edu/observing_facilities/hiaper National Center for Atmospheric Research Earth Observing Laboratory | 	https://www.eol.ucar.edu/ NSF/NCAR Research Aircraft | https://www.eol.ucar.edu/research-aircraft Research Aviation Facility Aircraft Instrumentation | www.eol.ucar.edu/aircraft-instrumentation HIAPER Investigator’s Handbook | www.eol.ucar.edu/content/nsfncar-gv-investigator-handbook Data Field Catalogs | http://catalog.eol.ucar.edu/ Categories: Gulfstream aircraft Meteorological instrumentation and equipment Atmospheric science research

Lauracsnider (talk) 18:59, 6 November 2018 (UTC)

Reply 07-NOV-2018
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