Talk:History of public relations/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: MrWooHoo (talk · contribs) 02:43, 17 October 2014 (UTC)

Hello! I will be reviewing this awesome article. However, first I'll work on this review first, then I'll do this article's review. Sit tight ;P Brandon (MrWooHoo) • Talk to Brandon!  02:43, 17 October 2014 (UTC)

Comments
Okay, I've taken a good look at the old GA review and the peer review, and there doesn't seem to be any comments that I could check off like I did with this review. I guess I'll move straight on with the review. (I do my review with one "main" review with a table, then I do a separate in-depth prose and source review. :) Brandon (MrWooHoo) • Talk to Brandon!  12:55, 22 October 2014 (UTC)

Prose Review
Hey CorporateM, sorry about delaying the review. School really got me busy .-.

Note: If you have changed the sentence that needed to be corrected, press Enter and start off the line with, then use ✅ or ✅ If the change was only partially done use, and or ❌ if the change could not occur. (If you would explain why, I would be greatly appreciated :P) To see code, go to edit source and copy the code.

Lead
Length is good and no grammar errors.

Ancient origins

 * "Although the term "public relations" was not yet developed, academics like James E. Grunig and Scott Cutlip have identified early forms of public influence and communications management in ancient civilizations.
 * Change have to had.
 * ✅ I just took it out. CorporateM (Talk) 00:09, 29 October 2014 (UTC)


 * "Scott Cutlip said historic events have been defined as PR retrospectively, "a decision with which many may quarrel."
 * Same error, change have to had.
 * Still current (present tense) there actually. CorporateM (Talk) 00:11, 29 October 2014 (UTC)

Antecedents

 * Change title from Antecededants to Antecedents. See Google search and Merriam-Webster
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 00:14, 29 October 2014 (UTC)

Origins as a profession

 * "In 1906 Lee helped facilitate some of the first positive media coverage the Pennsylvania Railroad had after inviting press to the scene of a railroad accident despite objections from executives."
 * Add comma after 1906.
 * ✅ I did some copyediting too. 00:16, 29 October 2014 (UTC)


 * "At the time, secrecy about corporate operations was common practice and for centuries before the progressive era the public didn't pry into business operations."
 * Add comma after era.
 * ✅ Actually I just trimmed the second half of that sentence - it was very editorialized and unecessary. CorporateM (Talk) 00:18, 29 October 2014 (UTC)


 * "In 1913 and 1914 the mining union was blaming the Ludlow Massacre, where on-strike miners and their families were killed by state militia, on the Rockefeller family and their coal mining operation, The Colorado Fuel and Iron Company."
 * Add comma after 1914.
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 00:19, 29 October 2014 (UTC)


 * "He wrote the first text-book on PR..."
 * text-book or textbook?
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 00:20, 29 October 2014 (UTC)

Wartime propaganda

 * No prose mistakes/grammar/spelling mistakes.

It seems to me that the first sentence of this paragraph and the last sentence cannot both be true. I understand that treating church teachings on par with propaganda is both factually accurate and starkly controversial. Nevertheless, the first sentence overstates... A good test for this? Can one say that Napoleon did not use propaganda on a wide scale to run his Grand Army? Wartime propaganda definitely goes back much further than WWI. Who doesn't know the story of the Gordian Knot? Who doubts that this was a propaganda effort on Alexander's part?

Professional development

 * "However, it failed to obtain complete recognition as a profession due in part due to a history of deceit."
 * Delete the second "due" after the word part.
 * ✅ CorporateM (Talk) 00:22, 29 October 2014 (UTC)

Social and digital

 * No prose mistakes/grammar/spelling mistakes.

Source Review
Used this to check.
 * Ref 56 is dead.
 * The link provided for citation 56 seems to work for me. CorporateM (Talk) 00:23, 29 October 2014 (UTC)


 * Note that ref 55, 96, and 95, are all downloadable/accessable via pdf/webpage, even though Checklinks says they are "errored."