Talk:Ho Ho Ho (album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:43, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Lead

 * by American singer RuPaul → you should specify that he's a drag queen, as well here
 * Added. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * written by Joe Carrano and RuPaul → state "written by Joe Carrano and RuPaul" here for alternation
 * I do not see the difference that you are pointing out; could you please explain this to me? Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)
 * OMG, I meant "written by Joe Carrano and the singer", sorry ;)


 * specifically "All Alone on Christmas" → specifically of "All Alone on Christmas"
 * I do not believe that this is correct; "specifically" without the "of" is the appropriate construction in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * negatively responded → other way round
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * of his VH1 talk show The RuPaul Show → when was this?
 * Added year. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Only link "executive producer" once in the "Producer" row
 * Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Recording and release

 * saying "You can hear us → saying, "You can hear us
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * a clear message; RuPaul explained: "Even the → a clear message, "Even
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * Rhino executive promoted → what does it mean to promote smth executive?
 * An executive is a job title so it is referencing an executive from the record label and how he or she promoted something. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * was made available on on October 28, 1997 → we only need one "on"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Composition

 * "the fact that I'm doing it" → "the fact that [he is] doing it"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * The final track is a remix of the "Celebrate" → "his" instead of "the"
 * I do not believe that is correct. This is the final track of the album; if you put "his final track" that is implying that it is RuPaul's final song ever, which is obviously not true as he released albums/songs after that and is still releasing music. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * It peaked at number 31 on Billboard Dance Club Songs chart on October 11, 1997 and remained on the chart for a total of seven weeks.[13] → This isn't relevant in any sort of way here, so I would suggest removing it.
 * If you clicked on the link, you would notice that Billboard attributes the song to this album. I would imagine that commercial performance of a song would be relevant to the album in which the song appears. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Reception

 * Ken Veeder of The Advocate praised RuPual's → "RuPaul's" is written incorrectly
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * positivel responding → "positively" is written incorrectly
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * Melinda Newman referenced the album → Melinda Newman referenced the album to
 * I use the construction "reference x as"; the construction "reference x to" would not be appropriate in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 17:24, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * "[m]akes me want to shove a candy cane in my eye" → "[m]akes [him] want to shove a candy cane in [her] eye"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * Connect the third paragraph to the second one
 * Not done as these two paragraphs are discussing two completely different ideas. The second paragraph is about negative reviews while the third is about a more joke review. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)


 * Include the info about the commercial performance above in the "Charts" section
 * Not done as I prefer to keep the commercial performance close to the Reception section, as done in Good Girl Gone Bad and 4 (Beyoncé album). Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Corrected things here by myself
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Personnel

 * Change all "-"s to "–"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Fixed all alone here
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Copy-violation

 * 33.3% is still acceptable!
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Links

 * 2 problems to be fixed here!
 * Thank you. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Outcome

 * for 7 days! GREAT job with the article!! Best regards and good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. I have addressed your comments above. Aoba47 (talk) 17:23, 30 April 2017 (UTC)
 * 'Passing this! YAY! Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:53, 30 April 2017 (UTC)