Talk:Hobitit/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 03:47, 20 January 2022 (UTC)


 * Link television miniseries.
 * Surely not worth linking such a common and self-explanatory term.
 * The lead's quite short, could be expanded with reception, production, etc.
 * Extended
 * "adapts quite faithfully the events until" → "adapts the events in the book faithfully until"
 * Fixed.
 * Hobbits should be capitalized, this needs to be done throughout the article.
 * Fixed.
 * Add Frodo and Sam's last names
 * Done.
 * "The series is divided into nine episodes" → Maybe move this later into the paragraph, after mentioning what the series is based on.
 * Done.
 * Link War of the Ring.
 * Done.
 * Add Merry and Pippin's last names, and maybe specify that these are their nicknames.
 * Added; not sure this article is that place for talking about nicknames.
 * "the Barrow-wight" → "a Barrow-wight"?
 * All right; only one is ever encountered but there must once have been many.
 * Link Fellowship of the Ring at first mention instead of second.
 * Done.
 * Link Orc.
 * Done.
 * "Gandalf apparently dies." → " Gandalf apparently dies in a fight with a Balrog." Since you mention the Balrog later.
 * Done.
 * It isn't mentioned that Strider is actually Aragorn.
 * Added.
 * "new family-produced" → Is this necessary? Also, what does family-produced mean?
 * Yes, it's a distinctive feature. It just means "produced by members of a family", as it sounds.
 * "such as" → "including"
 * OK for variety, it's not exactly better.


 * Nice work here overall. AryKun (talk) 07:55, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, all done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)