Talk:Hollywood Game Night/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AmericanAir88 (talk · contribs) 21:12, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

Good day, I will be handling the review for this article. I hope we can get through this easy and stress free. Happy Thanksgiving! AmericanAir88 (talk) 21:12, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

Opening Comments
Welcome to the review for Hollywood Game Night. I structure my reviews like a trial. My reviews are all about your voice as I will simply post issues and you will do the work solving them. If necessary I will make very minor copy edits to the article if I feel they don't need a whole bullet point dedicated to them. Anyway, I am looking forward to working with you. AmericanAir88 (talk) 21:12, 22 November 2017 (UTC)

Issues

 * The lead paragraph could use some expansion and reworking especially this section "The series has generally received positive critical reception and earned relatively modest television ratings, while also inspiring several worldwide adaptions, as well as a party game and mobile app based on the show. The series' fifth season premiered on June 22, 2017."
 * Done. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Excellent work AmericanAir88 (talk) 16:17, 25 November 2017 (UTC)


 * You mention several times that the celebrities donate to a charity. If you can, is it possible to find the charities they are donating to?
 * It varies based on which celebrity is playing; since it's almost always a different one, list every single charity would be superfluous and virtually impossible to cite. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Understandable AmericanAir88 (talk) 16:17, 25 November 2017 (UTC)


 * " The non-celebrity player is designated captain of the team." Confused me, Expand more.
 * Reworded (there are two contestants who are the captains of each team; three celebrities accompany each contestant on said teams. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Update the number of episodes and the "as of date"
 * It already is up to date; don't worry, if/when new episodes come back, I'll be on it :) --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)


 * The entire "Games" section feels run on, as each sentence starts with "Other games include" or something similar.
 * Done? Let me know how it reads now. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)


 * "On August 1, 2011, NBC announced that they were developing the series, then under the name Celebrity Game Night.[6] The project's name was changed to Hollywood Game Night when it was ordered to series on December 18, 2012." Very confusing. Wrong words in some places.
 * Fixed. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Update the Production section for recent times. It seems the fifth season has started.
 * Done. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)


 * If possible, expand the Merchandise section.
 * Not really possible as the only merchandise available to my knowledge is the app and the board game; I'll look into that though... --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)

AmericanAir88 (talk) 14:40, 23 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for this. Will be spending most of the day with family but will look at these when I can. Happy Thanksgiving, –Bcschneider53 (talk) 16:19, 23 November 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ everything, let me know how things look on your second pass through. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 00:24, 24 November 2017 (UTC)

I apologize for the delay, everything looks fantastic, the review chart will now begin its final stages. AmericanAir88 (talk) 16:18, 25 November 2017 (UTC)

Closing Comments
Congratulations on passing. Your dedication and hard work was fantastic. I hope we can work together in the near future. Have a fantastic rest of the weekend. If you want, Ill even review your other nomination of "1v100". Thank you. AmericanAir88 (talk) 16:29, 25 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you! No sweat if you're busy (it is that time of year again), but I would greatly appreciate a review of 1 vs. 100 if you are up to it. Also, let me know if I can do anything for you! --Bcschneider53 (talk) 16:35, 25 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Of course I will review it. Anything for you. AmericanAir88 (talk) 16:38, 25 November 2017 (UTC)