Talk:Holmes' Revelation/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 04:54, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

Taking this. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 04:54, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

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This very well written, but I'd like to see a few sentences to introduce the main characters for readers unfamiliar with the work. The age pills are also a matter that needs more explanation in the second sentence of the plot. The rest of the clues and eventual resolution seems to be good with one minor issue in the last paragraph. It says "revealing Hades plans to kill her" - is it not a singular plan? And if it's "Hades" plan it needs a comma to make it "Hades' plan". Some clarity is needed in the release section, for the second sentence as it is a bit ambiguous. I looked through the other GAN review and I am satisfied that some of the issues have been resolved. Just a few fixes and it should be okay to pass it. Placing it on hold. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 18:19, 6 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Disambig links: OK
 * Reference check: 2 issues
 * 1) Detective Conan '' Part 20 Vol.3 (info) [beinggiza.com] is 404
 * 2) Detective Conan '' Part 20 Vol.4 (info) [beinggiza.com] is 404

DragonZero ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 02:33, 7 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Replaced with new Being links.
 * I grouped Ran and Kogoro as his caretakers and left the wikilink to explain to the readers
 * Expanded on age pill. I thought it was good enough for readers to assume they were magic pills or something
 * I replaced plans with intends
 * I rewrote the release section
 * Alright, passed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 05:40, 7 January 2014 (UTC)