Talk:Hologram (Minmi song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 17:20, 27 August 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and my GAN review for your nomination is going to arrive soon. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:20, 27 August 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * stand alone → stand-alone
 * It was released as her third stand alone digital single on June 10, 2015, and distributed as a CD single, DVD single, and digital EP on July 22, 2015 through Universal J, a subsidiary label owned by Universal Music Group. → It was made available for digital download and physical consumption on June 10, 2015 through Universal Music Japan—a subsidiary label owned by Universal Music Group—as her third stand-alone single.
 * It was → "Hologram" marks
 * behind → after
 * was noted → was described
 * a critics at → a writer for
 * reggae music → reggae music styles
 * dancehall → dancehall music
 * received positive → received generally positive
 * selected that track as a stand out to the album → pointed out the track as a highlight from the album
 * whilst some also praised the composition → whilst acclaiming its production
 * was towards the autotune → was outspoken towards the Auto-Tune
 * this is her lowest selling → marking her lowest-selling
 * What is an "insert song"?
 * To promoted → In order to promote
 * for the Japanese → remove "the"
 * Alongside this → Additionally
 * she featured → she appeared
 * and performed → with her as well performing
 * concert → concert venue
 * ✅ this section.

Infobox

 * Caption is irrelevant and can thus be removed
 * There are three cover artworks to the single, so the caption must stay to identify which one it belongs to.


 * Remove "single" from "DVD single" and "CD single", and write "Digital download" uncapitalized
 * For genre, add instead EDM
 * Aren't writers/producers credited with their birth name? (I don't know, just asking )
 * ✅ this section.

Background and release

 * and would → which would
 * What is an "insert song"? + word repetition (song)
 * to the → for the
 * Japanese; → Japanese:
 * "Hologram" is → "Hologram" marks
 * her single "Ite Itai yo", which was released in 2014. → her 2014 single "Ite Itai yo".
 * noted by a critic at → pointed out by a writer for
 * reggae music → reggae music styles
 * Why is dance-pop and dancehall not included in the infobox?
 * I added dance-pop to the info box and lead, but dancehall was more as an "influence" as stated by the critic.


 * Why is dance-pop not written in the lead at the writer's part?
 * also features → also incorporates
 * link "synthesizers" and "keyboards" to their respective articles
 * while Minmi's vocals are processed with autotune → with Minmi's vocals being processed with Auto-Tune
 * as her third stand alone → as the singer's third stand-alone
 * Universal J → Universal Music Japan
 * The label is actually Universal J; a division from Universal Music Japan. Has been changed.


 * Universal Music Group; the → Universal Music Group. Its accompanying
 * Universal J → Universal Music Japan
 * Universal J distributed the song as a CD single and DVD single in Japan, and a digital EP in several other territories. All three formats included the single, alongside a remix version entitled the "Asahi Kuromine version", which is an ode to the main protagonist of the show the song was included into, plus the b-side track "#Yacchaina" featuring Japanese singer Mary Jane. The DVD version included a live performance of Minmi at the 2014 Freedom Aozora concert. → the label distributed the recording for physical consumption as a DVD and CD in Japan, with a digital EP being made available in several other territories All formats included the original mix of the single, with the addition of B-side track "#Yaccahaina" in collaboration with Japanese performer Mary Jane. The DVD release incorporated Minmi performing "Hologram" live at the 2014 Freedom Aozora concert venue.
 * Why is "#Yacchaina" written different in the infobox?
 * The artwork for all three formats featured a portrait shot of Minmi with pink-tinted hair and confetti digitally-superimposed on her → The cover sleeve for all three formats portrayed a pink-haired Minmi surrounded by digitally-superimposed confetti.
 * [7][2][6] → [2][6][7]
 * I don't particularly think this arrangement matters.
 * ✅ this section.

Reception

 * Greenberg, whom contributed to writing Mimni's biography on the website, selected the track as some of her best work. → Greenberg cited the track as one of Minmi's best works while contributing to her biography on the website.
 * member's → members
 * selected the song as one of the best tracks from her album Ego → pointed out "Hologram" as a highlight from her album Ego
 * In a separate review, a staff member from → Another critic from the same publication
 * the production "bold" and "spacey". → the recording's production as "bold" and "spacey"
 * The review also pointed out her vocals and song writing as stand outs elements to the song → He further acclaimed the singer's vocals and song writing on the single.
 * saying "In → concluded that "in
 * However, the review criticized the overuse → However, the publication negatively perceived the over-use
 * autotune in the track → Auto-Tune in the song
 * B-side songs → B sides
 * Commercially, the single → Commercially, "Hologram"
 * Minmi's lowest charting single since her 2012 single "La La La (Ai no Uta)"; the latter track reached number 58. → marking Minmi's lowest-charting release since "La La La (Ai no Uta)" (2012), which peaked at number 58.
 * it is her lowest ranking single at number 18 → Remove this, as it is already said in the precedent sentence
 * her lowest selling → her lowest-selling
 * ✅ this section.

Music video and promotion

 * The accompanying music video → An accompanying music video for "Hologram"
 * It opens with a woman walking down a beach front. By the pre-chorus, repetitive scenes of the woman holding and letting go of her bikini strap and hand claps start to show, whilst the chorus features her playing and dancing in the water. Throughout the entire video, it has the woman and a man, who has just been introduced during the second verse, playing around the beach front and in the water; despite this, several scenes and parts of the video are repeated. → It opens with a woman walking down a beach front, with her subsequently holding and letting go of her bikini strap by the pre-chorus. Over the rest of the visual, she is portrayed being engaged alone or with a man in the water or playing around the beach shore; several of the scenes repeat throughout the music video.
 * The music video did not appear on the DVD version of the single, but appeared on the DVD version for the parent album Ego (2016). → The clip appeared on the DVD version of its parent album, Ego.
 * [14]To promote → [14] In order to promote
 * What is an insert song?
 * for the Japanese → remove "the"
 * on the Japanese television → remove "the"
 * alongside an → alongside providing an
 * Minmi subsequently appeared at the 2016 Freedom Aozora concert; along with many other acts such as Scandal and 10-Feet, Minmi performed "Hologram" and other tracks → Minmi subsequently sang "Hologram" live at the 2016 Freedom Aozona concert venue; various other Japanese acts, such as Scandal and 10-Feet, were invited to the venue.
 * ✅ this section.

Credits and personnel

 * Credits adapted from the CD liner notes of "Hologram" → Credits adapted from the liner notes of "Hologram"'s CD release.
 * Where was it recorded?
 * Section removed.


 * Put the managing credits below the recording one
 * Management and record label Universal J. → Management done by record label Universal Music Japan
 * Credits → Technical and visual credits
 * Slightly tedious knowing there is limited credits.


 * Minmi – vocals → Minmi − lead vocals
 * featuring vocals → featured artist
 * ✅ this section.

Track list and formats

 * Rename section to "Track listing"
 * There are four formats, so it's left as it is.


 * All lyrics written by Minmi. → This section needs to be accompanied by the credits ref.
 * Remove "music" and "arrangements" credits.
 * This is a traditional application of Japanese musicians; see GA articles on Ayumi Hamasaki and Namie Amuro for examples


 * Bonus dvd → Bonus DVD
 * ✅ this section.

Weely charts

 * Rename section into "Charts" and make a sub-section called "Weekly charts"
 * Slightly tedious knowing there is only one chart section.

Release history

 * Use !scope="row" for countries (see this for an example)
 * Unlink label and formats
 * Universal J → Universal Music Japan
 * ✅ this section.

Outcome

 * On hold for 7 days. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:20, 27 August 2016 (UTC)
 * All finished! Thank you for your time CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 00:59, 28 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing. Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 03:34, 28 August 2016 (UTC)