Talk:Homer's Barbershop Quartet/GA1

GA Review
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Review from OK, that is the lead and Plot. Dabomb87 (talk) 20:19, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * "whose story roughly parallels" What kind of story? His life story?
 * "and The Dapper Dans as the singing voices of The Be Sharps." Needs a verb, maybe "and The Dapper Dans provide the singing voices of The Be Sharps."
 * "The episode begins with the Simpson family attending a swap meet." noun + -ing sentence structure is awkward, and "swap meet" needs to be disambiguated.
 * "Homer then explains to "
 * "recorded a barbershop quartet album" Already linked in the paragraph above.
 * "He tells his family the story of how the band formed" I think "narrates (to)" would be a stronger berb here.
 * "number one hit"-->number-one hit
 * "It was praised for its The Beatles cameo, despite being a leftover episode from the previous season." Why would being a leftover episode detract from its praise?
 * "Reviews that criticized the episode's comedy blamed the change of writers prior to the episode's creation for the inconsistent humor."-->Reviews that criticized the episode's inconsistent humor blamed it on the change of writers before the episode's creation.
 * " Back in the present"
 * "they were featured on merchandise " Comma after this phrase.


 * Done. The despite being a leftover episode is from the Reception section, specifically The Washington Post. Gary King  ( talk ) 20:51, 4 February 2009 (UTC)


 * "in the final aired version of the episode." Maybe this is me not understanding TV-speak but what is a "final aired version"? Were there multiple airings and each were different?
 * "When the episode went into production"-->When the episode's production began...
 * "show runners of the episode"-->episode's show runners
 * "that he rarely received questions about."-->that he was rarely questioned on.
 * "David Crosby also makes a guest appearance in the episode as himself.[8]" What role does he play in the episode?
 * "on which we see Homer turned " No first-person language please.
 * "bring them all together"
 * Ref 12 ""Nielsen Ratings /Sept. 27–Oct. 3"" Is the slash a typo? Dabomb87 (talk) 21:21, 4 February 2009 (UTC)


 * All done Gary King  ( talk ) 04:33, 5 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Sorry, I completely forgot about this review. Passing. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:25, 7 February 2009 (UTC)