Talk:Homeworld/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 23:29, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Looks good. But is it? Find out on the next episode of Homeworld Ball Z. Cognissonance (talk) 23:29, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * "The music of the game was composed by composer" — Minimize repetition: "The music was written by composer".
 * "which became considered the defining theme of the game" — Improve prose: "considered the defining theme of the game".
 * "which was also highly reviewed" — Minimize repetition: "which was also critically panned".

Gameplay

 * "In multiplayer games, the objective is typically to destroy the enemy motherships, though other battle-oriented victory conditions are available" — Clarify: "In multiplayer games, the objective is typically to destroy the enemy motherships, though in Homeworld other battle-oriented victory conditions are available".

Plot

 * "along with a stone map marking Kharak along with another planet across the galaxy" — Minimize repetition: "along with a stone map marking Kharak with another planet across the galaxy".

Development

 * "In addition to the original music compositions for the game" — Simplify: "In addition to the original music compositions".
 * "for the scene in the game" — Minimize repetition: "on behalf of the scene in the game".
 * "digital album bundled with the" — Minimize repetition: "digital album with the".

Reception

 * "noting that it was so good" can be less informal with "noting that it was beneficial".
 * "Levine claimed it was "on par with the graphics" and praised how the sound" — Clarify: "Levine claimed it was "on par with the graphics", praising how the sound".

Remaster

 * "who confirmed in 2007 that they has acquired the rights to the series" — Fix grammar: "which confirmed in 2007 that it had acquired the rights to the series".

Overall

 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Next episode of Homeworld Ball Z: Yes, it is good.
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Cognissonance (talk) 02:34, 23 October 2016 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Next episode of Homeworld Ball Z: Yes, it is good.
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Cognissonance (talk) 02:34, 23 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Cognissonance (talk) 02:34, 23 October 2016 (UTC)