Talk:Hompesch Hussars/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:03, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's it for a first read. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:26, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Was the Baron of Hompesch the same as Ferdinand von Hompesch zu Bolheim? If so, could link?
 * "British foreign corps" is that a formal title of a group of people? Is there an article?
 * "and would be disbanded" and was
 * "and would serve until" and served
 * "Uniform variations ..." fragment, no full stop.
 * The allegiance of the Hussars could be mentioned in the lead.
 * "In Spring 1794" avoid seasons, but if you must, why is this capitlaised?
 * "Charles, Freiherr von Hompesch signed" -> "Charles, Freiherr von Hompesch, signed".
 * "legion, later known as Hompesch's Legion. The new legion" legion, Legion, legion. Repetitive.
 * "of the following: 1 x Hussar" why not just "of one Hussar..."?
 * "formed, with its mounted element become the" perhaps "and with... became the..."?
 * "red hussar cap" link hussar.
 * "a fortnight (2 x weeks), " just say "In two weeks"
 * "Osnabrück ordered" comma before "ordered".
 * "On 14th September 1794" 14 not 14th.
 * "with 2 x squadrons" etc, avoid this 2 x midprose, and stick with plain English, like "two".
 * "On the 15th, the" either "On 15 September" or perhaps "The following day..."
 * "lost their 4 guns" four.
 * "the 1st December 1794" by 1 December 1794.
 * "based in Flanders and " overlinked.
 * "which would be known" become?
 * No point in red-linked See also articles.
 * Especially ones which are already red-linked in the article.
 * Refs 1, 2 and 4 needs en-dash in year range.
 * "period, 1792-1815. London" likewise.


 * Finished edits, check my sandbox for comments. J-Man11 (talk) 02:24, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Please keep review comments/responses in this GAN, not in your sandbox. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:58, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Will do, I'll copy them over now. J-Man11 (talk) 12:51, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

All completed, check comment J-Man11 (talk) 12:56, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Was the Baron of Hompesch the same as Ferdinand von Hompesch zu Bolheim? If so, could link?
 * No, different Hompesch, the one who raised the regiment was a Baron and first name was Charles, not Ferdinand. Possibly related?
 * "British foreign corps" is that a formal title of a group of people? Is there an article?
 * "and would be disbanded" and was
 * "and would serve until" and served
 * "Uniform variations ..." fragment, no full stop.
 * What needs to be changed?
 * The allegiance of the Hussars could be mentioned in the lead.
 * "In Spring 1794" avoid seasons, but if you must, why is this capitlaised?
 * "Charles, Freiherr von Hompesch signed" -> "Charles, Freiherr von Hompesch, signed".
 * "legion, later known as Hompesch's Legion. The new legion" legion, Legion, legion. Repetitive.
 * "of the following: 1 x Hussar" why not just "of one Hussar..."?
 * "formed, with its mounted element become the" perhaps "and with... became the..."?
 * "red hussar cap" link hussar.
 * "a fortnight (2 x weeks), " just say "In two weeks"
 * "Osnabrück ordered" comma before "ordered".
 * "On 14th September 1794" 14 not 14th.
 * "with 2 x squadrons" etc, avoid this 2 x midprose, and stick with plain English, like "two".
 * "On the 15th, the" either "On 15 September" or perhaps "The following day..."
 * "lost their 4 guns" four.
 * "the 1st December 1794" by 1 December 1794.
 * "based in Flanders and " overlinked.
 * "which would be known" become?
 * No point in red-linked See also articles.
 * Especially ones which are already red-linked in the article.
 * Refs 1, 2 and 4 needs en-dash in year range.
 * "period, 1792-1815. London" likewise.