Talk:Homura Akemi/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 12:22, 11 September 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the ✅ tag to state when something is addressed.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

 * It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
 * It contains copyright infringements -
 * It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include,, or large numbers of , , or similar tags. (See also ). -
 * It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Lede

 * Chiwa Saito is missing an accent Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * You mean her Japanese romanization? – Like this "Chiwa Saitō"? NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * I do - or at least her article has the diacritic on the o as well. We should be consistent with names in this way. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:16, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 14:08, 26 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Madoka from making contract with the messenger of magic - something is wrong here "Madoka from making a contract with the messenger of magic" or Madoka from making contact with the messenger of magic"? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Fixed. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Do we need to link surreal? Seems like a common enough word. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed link. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * I feel the first para on the conception and such is probably the more notable stuff than her canon. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * What do you mean? Could you elaborate more? NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Chiwa Saito voices her in the Japanese version of the series, while Cristina Vee voices her in the English version. - repeat "voices her", but there should be a better way to say this. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Revised. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * remains popular among fans - do we really care about this? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Well, she still tops anime character polls in Japan so I thought it's worth mentioning. If you feel it's unnecessary then I will remove it! NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Might be worth saying exactly that - rather than the more general overview. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:17, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed as I feel it's unnecessary. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 14:08, 26 September 2020 (UTC)
 * For voicing Homura, Saito won the 2011 Newtype Anime Award for Best Supporting Actress. - move to the section on voice acting. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:21, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed sentence. It's already in the "Critical response" section. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)

General

 * Accent for Saito in the caption also needs an accent. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * The article in general has some issues with linking quite common terms - heart disease, experiment, masterpiece et al. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Removed links. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * In The Rebellion Story is uncited. If this were plot, it isn't so bad, but at least a citation for the translations. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * PlayStation Portable action video game WP:SEAOFBLUE/ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Critical response has a major issue with WP:CITEKILL. 3 is the maximum amount of citations in a row - either kill the ones not needed, or try WP:BUNDLING. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * "Analysis" seems pretty WP:CRUFTY in my eyes - specifically the quotes. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * So what do you suggest? Should I rewrite the section or just trim? NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Trim the quotes - I'm a bit of a stickler for only adding quotes that actually make (or agree to) points in the article. There's a lot of quite long quotes that could be trimmed a bit. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:19, 25 September 2020 (UTC)
 * I trimmed some of the quotes. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 14:08, 26 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Merchandising could do with an image - but seems like mostly a list of things that they have merchandise of. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 15:27, 18 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! I will go through it and address the points you have noted in the next few days. NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 17:49, 19 September 2020 (UTC)
 * No worries. It's a nice article. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:23, 19 September 2020 (UTC)
 * No worries. It's a nice article. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:23, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

 * I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 12:22, 11 September 2020 (UTC)
 * Any updates on this ? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 16:39, 24 September 2020 (UTC)
 * I'm very sorry for getting late to it, I've been really busy lately...Anyways, great review! Looking forward to your responses! NotEnglishSpeaker (talk) 13:06, 25 September 2020 (UTC)