Talk:Honda Super Cub/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 19:43, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

I promised I would review this when I had time. Sorry for the wait though. Thanks!  ΤheQ Editor  Talk? 19:43, 26 October 2014 (UTC)

Development

 * "unlike other Japanese companies did not" change to "unlike other Japanese companies, they did not"
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * The last sentence in paragraph 1 is too long. There are too many cases of semi colons.
 * You don't have to put a citation at the end of every sentence. If you are using 1 footnote to cite multiple consecutive sentences, only cite it at the very end. (not required for GAC)
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * "His goal was export on a scale" change to "His goal was exported on a scale"
 * ✅? See below. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * wikilink die cast
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * "run at full capacity" - run should be ran
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * The picture either needs to be a full sentence or have no period at the end.
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:45, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

Design

 * There are two "and"s in the sentence of "It moved the engine down and away from the seat," perhaps replacing the first "and" with "it"
 * ✅ fixed Brianhe (talk)


 * "and it made possible larger wheels." should be "and made it possible for larger wheels."
 * ✅ changed to "made it possible to fit larger wheels" Brianhe (talk)


 * The sentence "Though some of the many Super Cub variations..." is too long.
 * ✅ split into two, trimmed second sentence Brianhe (talk)


 * "his was an extremely simple motorcycle," - "extremely" sounds too biased. Cross extremely out.
 * ✅ fixed Brianhe (talk)


 * File:Honda Super Cub at Seattle Children's Museum1.jpg's caption isn't a complete sentence. Make it a complete sentence or drop the period.
 * ✅ fixed Brianhe (talk)


 * Why use "@"? Is that a special annotation, if so link to the page.
 * ✅ spelled out "at" Brianhe (talk) 00:15, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

"You meet the nicest people on a Honda"

 * The heading needs to meet WP:Headings. Change it to "Advertising" or anything else you feel appropriate.
 * ✅ Changed to "Advertising campaign that invented lifestyle marketing" Brianhe (talk)


 * FN 37 doesn't say anything about ""added to the macho Harley image."
 * I see it in the next-to-last paragraph on page 45. Are you sure you didn't miss this? Brianhe (talk)
 * Link. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 00:09, 1 November 2014 (UTC)


 * File:Supercubca100.JPG's caption isn't a complete sentence. Make it a complete sentence or drop the period.
 * ✅ fixed Brianhe (talk)


 * File:Harley-Davidson Young America advertisement.jpg same thing as above
 * ✅ fixed Brianhe (talk) 00:04, 1 November 2014 (UTC)

Model History

 * "until 1967" - what happened? You may want to reword the order of it
 * "After 1980 the USA C70 was called the C70 Passport." - expand on that or merge that in another paragraph.
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)


 * FN 41 looks good to me. Consider removing the [better source] tag.
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)


 * File:Honda Dream 110i Super Cub ND110M 2014 Right.JPG needs a proper caption
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)


 * "In late 1960" - should be "In the late 1960s"
 * "When you talk about Japanese" - did the quote ever end?
 * ✅ --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)
 * There are still some issues in this section. After those are fixed, welcome the article to GA!  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 01:30, 3 November 2014 (UTC)
 * I didn't mean before to imply were were done. Now it looks like we've fixed 'em all. Let us know. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 02:03, 3 November 2014 (UTC)

Current popularity

 * "The Super Cub was included The Guggenheim's" - should be "The Super Cub was included in The Guggenheim's"
 * ✅ fixed Brianhe (talk) 23:51, 31 October 2014 (UTC)

Questions/comments

 * "His goal was export on a scale" change to "His goal was exported on a scale"
 * Fujisawa didn't want to export his goal. His goal was to have large-scale exports of bikes. Maybe it should say "...was to export motorcycles on a scale..."
 * Why use "@"? Is that a special annotation, if so link to the page.
 * I can't find any preference for @ or 'at' on peak torque or hp. FAs Talbot Tagora and Sunbeam Tiger use @. I wish Torque had fewer physics formulas and more plain English explanations of why we express torque (and hp) this way. I don't know where else to link.
 * "In late 1960" - should be "In the late 1960s"
 * This is from a chart; the year was definitely 1960, per p. 39 of same source. Probably "mid" is more accurate than late, or just "In 1960" if we don't know the month. --Dennis Bratland (talk) 23:27, 31 October 2014 (UTC)