Talk:Hooghalen train crash/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kj cheetham (talk · contribs) 13:29, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Starting review, may be a few days. -Kj cheetham (talk) 13:29, 23 August 2023 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * No copyvio issues.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Neutral wording.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Seems stable.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * All images are okay, with captions and appropriate licensing. Noted one was marked as "fair use".
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Hi, here is my review. Starting with a first pass of sections:
 * Lede - okay
 * Background - okay, but should CAF be spelled out?
 * Accident - okay. Not sure if it's worth adding a few sentances summarising the "Alarming" section of the ProRail pages 7-8?
 * Added a "Immediate response" subsection.
 * Investigation - okay
 * Trial - okay
 * Aftermath - okay

Now checking sources (I'm using Google Translate for Dutch ones):
 * [1] Okay, but for the sentance NABO's do not have closing barriers and are mostly used in rural areas where there are fewer people, it supports most of it, but not the "rural areas" part as far as I can see?
 * The source says "Ze komen vaak voor op onverharde wegen en paden" (at unpaved roads and paths), which only exist in rural areas in the Netherlands.
 * [2] Okay
 * [5] Okay
 * [7] Okay
 * [8] Okay
 * [10] Okay
 * [11] Okay
 * [12] Mostly okay, the article says 150 metres and the source says "approximately 154 meters".
 * [17] Okay
 * [19] The article says The railway line was closed for 3 days but the source is only 2 days after the crash, saying more time is needed, but doesn't confirm it was 3 days in the end.
 * The source says that work was expected to be finished on monday morning (so 3 days), but was delayed to monday evening (also 3 days). This liveblog by ProRail had its last update on monday morning, saying that it would be done by 14:00. I can use both sources if you want.
 * [22] Okay
 * [24] Okay
 * [26] Okay

Optional minor grammar suggestions:
 * "180 of the passive crossing" to "180 of the passive crossings"
 * "dark blue and white coloured livery" to "dark blue and white livery"
 * "9 seconds later" to "Nine seconds later"
 * "escaped without any" to "escaped unharmed"
 * "drivers cabin" to "driver's cabin"
 * "The collision knocked and damaged" to "The collision knocked over and damaged"
 * "unobstructed view on trains" to "unobstructed view of trains"
 * "low altitude fog" to "low-altitude fog"
 * "withstand the force of such impact" to "withstand the force of such an impact"
 * "railway line was closed for 3 days" to "railway line was closed for three days"
 * "closed within 9 months" to "closed within nine months"
 * "according to NS these are not suitable" to "according to NS these are neither suitable"

Overall, looking good! I'll put this on hold to give you chance to respond to the points above.

As an aside, should it also be listed on Template:Railway accidents and incidents in 2020, given it's used on the article? -Kj cheetham (talk) 19:37, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review . I've made some changes. Styyx (talk) 13:04, 25 August 2023 (UTC)
 * All good to me, so I'm going to mark this as pass. Thank you for creating the article! You may want to add https://www.prorail.nl/nieuws/herstelwerk-bij-hooghalen as an additional reference, but not essential. -Kj cheetham (talk) 13:34, 25 August 2023 (UTC)