Talk:Hostage (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:03, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

I hope this review goes well with you being on Wiki more now --K. Peake 10:03, 16 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * WP:OVERLINK of Billie Eilish under songwriters
 * Identify him as Finneas under producers
 * "from her debut EP Don't Smile at Me (2017)." → "from her debut EP, Don't Smile at Me (2017)."
 * Wikilink Finneas O'Connell
 * "whilst the latter solely handled its production." → "while the latter solely handled production."
 * "Musically, it was described as a" → "The song is a"
 * "Lyrically, the track is" → "Lyrically, it is"
 * "feels for a boy" → "feels for a male"
 * "The track was accompanied by a music video released" → "An accompanying music video was released" with the wikilink
 * Mention about the video's synopsis in the following sentence
 * ""Hostage" was certified platinum in the United States and Canada." → "The song was certified platinum by the Recording Industry Assocation of America (RIAA) and Music Canada (MC) in the United States and Canada, respectively." with the wikilinks
 * Mention something about live performance(s) in the last sentence

Background and composition

 * "is the eighth and final track on Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me," → "was included as the eighth and final track on Eilish's debut EP Don't Smile at Me,"
 * "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
 * "her brother Finneas O'Connell. Finneas was also" → "her brother Finneas O'Connell, known under his stage name of Finneas. He was also solely"
 * Target mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Target mastering to Mastering (audio)
 * "to sheet music website Musicnotes.com," → "to the sheet music published at Musicnotes.com,"
 * "vocals range between" → "span a range from"
 * ""Hostage" is a" → "Musically, "Hostage" was described as a"
 * "a happy relationship." → "a happy relationship:"
 * "I want to be alone, alone with you, does that make sense?" are the actual lyrics according to the source. I supposed the commas may be used to separate lines, but still, make sure the words are correct 100%
 * "sense?" she harmonizes with her Finneas." → "sense?", she harmonizes with Finneas."
 * "them for herself. "I wanna" → "them for herself: "I want to"
 * "Eilish turns out..." where does the source say this?
 * "She wants to keep him..." where does the source say this and there is no mention of the following lyrics?

Reception

 * Retitle to Reception and promotion, placing the live performances at the bottom of this section instead of where they currently are
 * "described it as" → "described the song as"
 * "and says it" → "and said that it"
 * "on dangerous." She further compared it" → "on dangerous". She further compared the song"
 * ""and vulnerability" of "Idontwannabeyouanymore"." → "and the "vulnerability" of "Idontwannabeyouanymore", both of which are from Don't Smile at Me."
 * "The staff remarked it as" → "The staff hailed the song as"
 * "The song placed at" → "The song was placed at"
 * Fix Insider typo and target to Insider (website) per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "with Claudia Willen describing it 'artfully" → "with Claudia Willen of the website noting that it "artfully"
 * "And shows Eilish's" → "She continued, writing that the song shows Eilish's"
 * "received a platinum certification in" → "has been certified platinum in"
 * The live performances should be straight after this in the para

Background and release

 * Retitle to Background
 * Wikilink music video
 * "released exclusively for" → "released exclusively via"
 * "It was later uploaded to" → "The video was later uploaded to"
 * "to create a white room" → "to create a room"
 * "Eilish explained it a statement" → "Eilish explained in a statement"
 * "the visual.[13] They had trouble" → "the visual, as a result of issues with schedules and trouble" since the source you obviously intended to place here does mention the other part which is notable fully
 * "They'd eventually figure out a plan where Stromae and Luc's would come up with the idea and Scholfield" → "They eventually figured out a plan that involved Stromae and Tam coming up with the idea, while Scholfield"
 * "They had to" → "The group had to"
 * "Eilish's tour. They rehearsed the choreography" → "Eilish's tour, with them rehearsing the choreography"
 * "they would shoot the video" → "the group shot the music video"
 * "Eilish concludes, saying:" → "Eilish concluded by saying,"

Synopsis

 * Retitle to Synopsis and reception, since the following sub-section is so short that it can be a para directly below this one
 * "The setting of the video takes place in an all-white room," → "The music video is set in an all white room,"
 * [4] should be solely at the end of the para since it is the sole ref here
 * "her lover dressed in all white." → "her lover, who are both dressed in all white."
 * "as he is getting pulled up." → "beneath the fabric while he is getting pulled up."
 * "He stops moving..." this sentence is not backed up

Reception

 * Target Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "the choreography, saying" → "the choreography of the video, saying that"
 * "says the video" → "wrote that the video"
 * "while Eilish and her" → "while he stated that Eilish and her"
 * ""Hostage" received a" → "The music video received a"
 * Target Best Cinematography to MTV Video Music Award for Best Cinematography

Live performances

 * "performed live during Eilish's" → "performed "Hostage" live during her"
 * "the setlist of her" → "the setlist of Eilish's"

Credits and personnel

 * Good

Year-end charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Final comments and verdict
Kyle Peake, thanks a lot for the review! Lmk if anything else needs to be done! The Ultimate Boss (talk) 05:55, 17 October 2020 (UTC)
 * after a quick review, this article is decent currently --K. Peake 12:58, 16 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ now because nothing else needs to be done after some brief copy editing from me! --K. Peake 09:34, 17 October 2020 (UTC)