Talk:House of Dracula/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll look at this tomorrow when I am more awake! —  Ghost River  05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * "and later by Lawrence Stewart Talbot / The Wolf Man," "and later by Larry Talbot, the Wolf Man"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "Talbot survives the fall" "He survives the fall"
 * Link "Frankenstein's monster" in the first paragraph, delink in the second
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * The plot summary is a little dense for a lede section; covering that Drac and the Wolf Man are searching for cures, that Talbot finds Frankenstein's monster, and that Edelmann becomes transformed into a monster himself should cover it without the current levels of detail"
 * I've tried to shorten it up. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * The title "Dracula Vs. The Wolf Man" is not mentioned below; the body has the order of the "vs." flipped
 * Fixed. Wolf Man vs. Dracula is the correct title. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Whatever the film title is, it should be italicized in the sentence beginning "The film eventually went into production"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Missing period after "put on hold for nearly six months"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "screenings; retrospective" "screenings, while retrospective"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:40, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Plot

 * Plot summary is 612 words, under the 700-word max, good job
 * Right on. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Count Dracula
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "Dr. Franz Edelmann. The count explains" "Dr. Franz Edelmann and explains that"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "can cure vampirism." "may heal him."
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Frankenstein's monster and
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Link "Dr. Niemann" to House of Frankenstein (film), as that's when the body-clutching happens
 * Done. Wouldn't this go against WP:EGG though? Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I would say not, as WP:EGG mostly refers to when you think something will link to a common term and then it doesn't; since Dr. Niemann is original to this particular film, someone wanting to know about the character would end up there anyway, if that makes any sense. —  Ghost River  15:10, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Clavaria formosa and capitalize Clavaria as the genus
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "and tosses her body" "and throws her body"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:44, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Cast

 * Good

Development

 * "whose script" "the script of which"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "to be Ford Beebe"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "The Invisible Man's Revenge (1944)"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "two film deal" "two-film deal"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Some reordering is in order so that we know the working title was Destiny by the time we get to the studio memo; currently we only get "titled Destiny" in the second para
 * Done, and re-arranged a pinch. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * WL World War II
 * linked. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:53, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Pre-production

 * "Dracula was being portrayed again by Carradine as he had in House of Frankenstein." "Carradine instead portrayed Dracula, reprising his role from House of Frankenstein."
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:54, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "Dracula in 1986"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:54, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Filming

 * Comma after "difficult for the actor"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:57, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "rushed to his dressing room"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:57, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "To save on lumber and nails for the war effort, existing sets were reused. The props and sets were from earlier films including The Invisible Woman and The Mummy's Hand." "To save on lumber and nails for the war effort, existing props and sets from films such as The Invisible Woman and The Mummy's Hand were reused."
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:57, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "reused in House of Dracula"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:57, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Release

 * "West coast" "West Coast" and link to West Coast of the United States
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:58, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "placed House of Dracula earning" "placed House of Dracula's earnings"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:58, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "being beaten by" "that honor went to"
 * Comma after "Lady on a Train (1945)"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:58, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "which also included"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:58, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "release don" "released on"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 07:58, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * ""... invaded," adding "the ..."" ""... invaded", adding, "the ...""
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:01, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "substituting quantity for imagination"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:01, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "Outside of New York"
 * done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:01, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after ""is the more interesting of the two"" but outside the quotes
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:01, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Nix the parenthetical, we know the premise from reading the plot summary
 * Fair enough, removed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:01, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "believability" should be in single quotes per MOS:QWQ
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:01, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

Legacy

 * Comma after "J. Arthur Rank"
 * added, Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:04, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "$4.6 million which led to it dropping many actors from their contract roster including Chaney." "$4.6 million. They responded by dropping many actors from their contract roster, including Chaney."
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:04, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * " company now called Universal-International had" "company, now called Universal–International, had"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:04, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Link Maria Montez
 * Linked. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:04, 27 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Comma after "and Frankenstein's monster"
 * Done. I believe you mean the first time it's mentioned here. Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:04, 27 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes, my apologies. —  Ghost River  15:10, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * Images are properly licensed and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks good

That's all I have! Looks like a lot, but it's mostly minor grammatical things. Putting on hold for now; feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're ready for me to take another look! —  Ghost River  03:33, 27 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I believe I have gone through everything! Is there anything else you require from me? Andrzejbanas (talk) 08:05, 27 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I made a couple of minor follow-up edits on my own, and I think that this one is now ready to go! Good job! —  Ghost River  15:10, 27 October 2021 (UTC)